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    Elephants yeah!

    Any comments on this in progress scene for a story set during the Indian Mutiny? (The middle elephant is supposed to be an African one, by the way...
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    Hello dear, I think you made a good piece, but it still under development...

    If you are painting a realistic piece, I don't know about the story you are trying to tell us, but, why to use na African elephant at India?

    I don't see any problem with the structure of the charcters at the scene.

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    Lots of compositional, structural, perspective, lighting mistakes here.

    Spend more time planning, less time painting, really. You need a tight, well-planned drawing before you paint.
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    Can you be more specific?

    Here is an update, anyway.Name:  elephants wip 8 sm 900.jpg
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    Quote Originally Posted by dashinvaine View Post
    Can you be more specific?
    I don't have time to write a dozen pages on specific mistakes, sorry. :/

    I can mention a few. There is inconsistent lighting on different parts of the picture: you have an elephant lit from top-right (except for its ear), an elephant lit from the front, and riders lit mostly from top-right, but not all of them. You have spurious tangents everywhere, the rider's head coincident with an elephant's leg, a notch in its ear coincident with the howdah, a pike coincident with the blanket, and I suspect I could fill a page just enumerating those. You have a problem keeping parallel lines parallel and ellipses round. Your values are inconsistent: horses in the open are several grades darker than the windows of a building. You gloss over anatomy where you aren't sure of it. You are using neutral grays for shading. Most of your edges are scribbly or dirty, and overall your brushwork is very sloppy. The detail level is not used well; you have the same level of detail in the background figures as the foreground, instead of using it to emphasize the point of the picture. And so on, and so on.

    This all boils down to a need for overall skill improvement, not to a few changes you could make to fix this picture.

    Try "Creative Illustration" by Loomis.
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