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    My very first concept art piece

    Hi everyone. I hope you are well.

    I was told about this site by the tutors on the illustration and concept art course I will be starting in September. So I thought I would get involved.

    I am a newb to concept art and I have attached my very first piece and was wondering if you would be kind enough to crit what I have done. I would really appreciate it.

    It is part of my summer prep work. I wanted to create a piece called invasion.

    I would love to hear your thoughts.

    Have a great day.

    Pete

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    I like the contrast between the warm bottom and the cool green on the top. Some composition critiques, I put in red circles below were some forms just touch others, forming tangents. There's not enough information on which overlaps which so it would work best if you overlapped these things or made them not touch at all. Similar to the way you have the tube wrapping around the bottom of the ship, this creates a lot of depth that eliminating tangents would help follow through with. I added the green circle because this area isn't conveyed as strongly as it could either. The spikes on the right are overlapping on and broken by the tube, which is great for defining space. The 3 on the left should be shown before or behind the tube OR add detail to bring forward or with some atmosphere infront to push them backward. Pretty nice otherwise. The bottom half has wonderful description of space.

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    Thank you so much for your comments. It's exactly what I needed. I will make the changes you suggested and re-upload. I really appreciate you taking time to give me feedback.

    Have a great day

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    Hi NicoleWG. I have made the changes you mentioned. Do you think it looks better?

    I have also added a soldier in the foreground the give a little more scale to the piece. Do you think this is effective?

    I would love to hear anyones thoughts on this.

    thank you in advance.

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    Yes, this read even better now. Adding the soldier was an excellent idea since without him there's no way to know how big anything is. I'm also interested to see other feedback here.

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    Thank you again for your feedback. It means a lot.
    I would love to hear other peoples comments and suggestions.
    Have a great day.

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    Looks amazing to me. I'm just transitioning from traditional to digital and I'm getting used to doing work like this.

    What course are you starting? I might look into it myself

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    Hi, thank you for your comment and compliment. I really appreciate it. I am starting a course in Doncaster, UK. It's illustration and concept art at High Melton. I have never done anything like it before and want a career change. This is my first piece. I'm 42. I'm a little nervous about starting a course in a subject I know nothing about, so I just wanted feedback to see if I was in the right direction with the composition, lighting, scale, depth . . .etc. And even the subject matter.

    thanks again.

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    I thought I'd upload the final version. I thought the first ones colours were dull, so I have added more contrast to the lighting. I wanted the lava to pop more.

    I would love to hear anyones thoughts.

    Have I gone too far and over-worked it?

    Thanks in advance.

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    Pete this is great. I would say don't start with so much black. borrow colors from all over the canvas and use them. A lot of blue/green light from the sky or orange from the lava that could be thrown around to lighten up the big black areas. Too much black makes things look like photos with bad exposure settings. Maybe also do some material indication studies, that'll help you in the future to differentiate between metal, rocks, organic material and so on.

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    Hi Pete,
    good start.
    Im going to be blunt because I want this to be great, and Im sure you do also.
    First off, the mech needs some adjustments. The leg joints are not making any sense right now. Use some reference from mechanical equipment like CAT vehicles. Study how they move and how things are attached. This will help you to create realistic mechs and you will find yourself learning a lot of important stuff.

    Keep it up mate,

    Liam

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    Thanks for your awesome feedback Liam. I really appreciate it. I do want it to be great. I totally see what you mean about the mech. I'll get cracking with some studies.
    Have a great day.
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    Thank you so much for your invaluable feedback @CampbellWhite I'll definitely start looking at materials a lot more and the depth of the black. I definitely see it now.
    thanks again. I really appreciate it.

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