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    C & C Please

    Hey guys,
    This is a piece for a personal project. Having brought it so far, and before I finished it, I was wondering if I could get some comments on it. What I could fix to make it better. Any and all advice will be helpful. Thanks.

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    Neat piece. I don't see anything obviously wrong with it but maybe you can add some security guards to give the piece more life. I would put some on the bridge as well. As for the drone I'd move him to the side of the entrance a bit next to a guard and give it some effects like some smoke or blinking lights. To me, the way the drone is placed looks awkward being right in the centre. Hope this helps.

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    hey crankshaft,
    Thanks a ton for the comment . I'll make sure I fix all those things before I wrap it up. Thats super cool advice.

    Jha

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    Hey there, nice work! The rendering and atmosphere look good, though it could use to be spiced up a bit. I can see it's not supposed to be an action scene or anything, but a little more snazz and bits of visual interest would help to draw the viewer in. But my main concern is that there's no real focal point. I know the droid is supposed to be, thanks to those handy yellow arrows and the spotlight, but the white droid is set in front of a white wall and almost disappears. My brain focuses on those big red panels instead.

    So yeah, spice it up a bit and emphasize the focal point, and this piece should wrap up nicely

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    ha ha! Thanks so much for the spice it up. I had fixed a lot of things. But the spice it up really made me rethink everything. The spice is on its way. Hope i get it right though. Thanks for the comment, really. Thank you. It is extremely helpful. Will post something before I finish. please do feel free to comment if you have time.

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    Hey guys, I fixed some things, tried to make it spicier and also tried to fix the comp as much as I could get away with, but i guess i failed miserably. but do comment, it might be helpful. thanks in advance. Your comments have been really helpful. Like really thanks a ton!

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    Nice improvement! This time there is definitely more emphasis on the drone. However, using the rule of thirds I would move the drone a bit to the right so that more of the middle of it touches the lines. Also, I would change the crop so that the drone sits roughly in the middle, close to the red line. Right now it looks too low, which isn't good for a focal. I like the idea of an electric fence overhead but it's too bright and distracting from the drone. Maybe crop out some of it instead? Hope this helps.

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