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July 10th, 2014 #1
WIP critique please
I dug out an old image from my artwork graveyard, I remember keeping it because I liked the design of the creature. I posted the original on this thread quite a while ago, and it turned out it contained so many errors it would have been easier to start again rather than fix it.
What I ended up doing however was cutting out the demon and painting a new image up around him. I know this jigsaw approach is never usually a good idea, so wanted to run it past a second pair of eyes before I went any further. It's called "Orpheus" now, hence the lyre.
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some thoughts. excuse the point form
-too many small details and small brushstrokes
-inconsistent light source
-composition is static... characters just standing there
-because of these things my eye goes to the dead centre of the painting and doesn't know where to go from there... this is a compositional issue as well.
sorry i'm really pressed for time to write something coherent
here's a quick paint over that address some of these issues.
July 10th, 2014 #3
Yeah the pose of the monster is bothering me - too static and stiff. Looks like it is bending on a hinge at the hip, which is also making it look top-heavy and off balance to me.
I also can't quite tell what the narrative is. Are they fighting or talking?
It's got potential though. Keep at it!
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July 12th, 2014 #4
Thanks pindurski and Dahlia
Tried to make a diagonal that leads to the monster's face, and de-cluttered the details from the bottom of the image. Sorted out the stiff pose and (I hope) have created a bit of tension between demon's dynamic pose and the calm confidence of the foreground figure.
Context wise, a gatekeeper is reluctant to let a living being enter hell, but the pure soul of Orpheus allows him to pass through freely.
July 14th, 2014 #5
July 22nd, 2014 #6
Thanks for the second paintover Pindurski. I tried to separate the coattails so they weren't overlapping, but I am wondering if the legs look to short now in contrast with the torso? Does the large flat(ish) area on the knee draw the eye too much?
July 22nd, 2014 #7