I would like you to really bite down and focus on proportion and accurate shape mapping. Here is a bargue drawing that shows how that is done. The key is to take your time and double and triple check all your shapes before moving into value. You did a nice job with your values but there is quite a lot of distortion, which is ok if that is totally on purpose. If you are wanting to do more of a characature feel then you achieved that. Is that what you are shooting for?
Nope Caricature was'nt my intention in the slightest XD.(unless you're also counting the 2nd portrait I did from my mind, did'nt really care much for proportions with that as I was just trying to apply what i'd learned from the self portrait lighting.)
I had to be right up close to the mirror so it was a bit of a pain to measure it, regardless I do need to work on my proportions & accuracy, I was thinking of starting some bargue drawings recently so thanks for posting that, i'll give it a shot.
Thanks!, turns out I actually have the whole set of bargue drawings on my pc, honest to god don't even know where I got them from.
Anyway I brilliantly decided to draw these on a3 paper, so I had to scan them in two parts, this means theres a cut down the middle where the lines are all wonky, i'm gonna do more of these so I'll do the rest on a4.