I would like you to really bite down and focus on proportion and accurate shape mapping. Here is a bargue drawing that shows how that is done. The key is to take your time and double and triple check all your shapes before moving into value. You did a nice job with your values but there is quite a lot of distortion, which is ok if that is totally on purpose. If you are wanting to do more of a characature feel then you achieved that. Is that what you are shooting for?
Nope Caricature was'nt my intention in the slightest XD.(unless you're also counting the 2nd portrait I did from my mind, did'nt really care much for proportions with that as I was just trying to apply what i'd learned from the self portrait lighting.)
I had to be right up close to the mirror so it was a bit of a pain to measure it, regardless I do need to work on my proportions & accuracy, I was thinking of starting some bargue drawings recently so thanks for posting that, i'll give it a shot.
ok great. feel free to post them here and I will take a look. Once you work on capturing shapes some more it will come more easily.
just time...keep it up!!
Thanks!, turns out I actually have the whole set of bargue drawings on my pc, honest to god don't even know where I got them from.
Anyway I brilliantly decided to draw these on a3 paper, so I had to scan them in two parts, this means theres a cut down the middle where the lines are all wonky, i'm gonna do more of these so I'll do the rest on a4.
Awesome...keep this up as it is going to really help you to continue to see shapes in an interesting way and also with accuracy.
Check out artists like lucian freud, who also plays with shapes a lot, as well as Michael Hussar, Zorn, Sargent, velasquez and rembrandt.
Keep pushing. As long as you keep seeing things as simple shapes, your proportions will improve as long as you are honest about what you see.
keep it up.