I would be pleased to know what anyone thinks of this. The drawing is "finished" in that I'm not editing it further. But I would be happy to incorporate advice into my next project!
- use 3-point perspective to communicate height
- use atmospheric perspective to communicate depth
- your foreground knight blends with your middleground group, which flattens things out
- your composition needs work, my eye wanders aimlessly around
You've actually done a pretty good job with atmospheric perspective -- broadly, that things in the distance are lighter and lower in contrast, and things in the foreground are darker.
If I had to point to one thing that's hurt this picture, it's that soldier in the middle. He needs to be bigger, darker and further to the right. Compositionally, that would lead the eye in a diagonal from bottom right to upper left. It would also give you a clear fore-, middle- and background.
Where he is, his position is ambiguous and he's messing with the silhouettes of the people going through the gate.
Big, ambitious thing, though. I assume it's pencil? If it isn't Stabilo or something, it might still be fixable.
I was once on the receiving end of a critique so savagely nasty, I marched straight out of class to the office and changed my major (sketchbook).
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