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Hello guys! For those who remember few weeks ago I've posted a WIP (here: http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...ece?highlight=) but it raised many (valid) objections. Soooooo, here is a different version, what do you think? Obviously it's very rough so far but the general idea is here so any advices in order to improve it are welcome.
I think the narrative is more effective now. It's clear that she's shocked and confused by what she's found.
I'm still curious as to where this is and how she found it, and the upper left quadrant of the image is very bare. Perhaps you can add some narrative clues that also give us something to look at and tie the compositional elements together. Think about what the composition needs and then think about what could fit that need and add another piece to the puzzle that is your narrative.
Another option would be to crop the left side off and make it a vertical piece.
You might want to consider using a Dutch angle where you rotate the whole image like 10 degrees, like the camera we're looking through is on a tilt. I don't personally like that style, but it can help give the viewer the feeling that something is 'off' here, increasing psychological tension in the mood.
I would really like to see some hands a little closer to her, maybe even on her, trying to drag her down. That would help the composition by leading us to her via the arms and make it feel more active, like the arms are a real threat to her and she needs to wake up from the shock and get out of there before they pull her in.
Also, push the values on the figure. There should be a strong core shadow between the light from the lamp and any reflected/atmospheric light that would be coming from the right.
Ok, I've worked a bit on it. Esentially on value.
@Dierat: I agree about the upper left side emptiness and I plan to work about it. The tilted idea seems good to me too. I will probably integrate tis in the final step.
What do you think so far?
Hum... seems this thread doesn't interest a lot people but whatever, I'm stubborn.
I wasn't satisfied by the results I had so far and colors are always hard to handle for me, especially when everything else is not right. Soooo, I'm back to my salvation modus operandi and went to grayscale. Any thought?
Is that with the tilt? It's a little hard to tell. I would do a bunch of variations with different levels of rotation to find out which looks best. I googled for dutch angle images to see how it's usually done, and some of them are quite extreme with good results.
Also try rotating it the other way. If the hands were up and the girl were done, I think they would make them seem even more threatening. The more you rotate her up, the more safe and empowered she will appear.
And maybe move that lamp to the left a little. As the brightest element in the scene, it's going to attract a lot of attention, but moving it further off-center might help alleviate that.
This is a bit of a nitpick but I don't get the shadow on the left side of the lamp. If that's being cast by the metal strip on the left side of the lamp, wouldn't that shadow be cast directly left of the lamp (rather than left and back)?
Great work on the face btw; her eyes look really freaked out
For those interested here is the final(?) version: