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    First one. I chose this painting because of the simplicity of the mid tones and dark tones used to portray the mood and the economy of the painting. There is a lot of rhythm with the pen strokes and the shadows are in a rhythmical movement. Truth be told.. it was hard.. Name:  Mucha-bouquet altogether.jpg
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    Quote Originally Posted by mrchrishkim View Post
    First one. I chose this painting because of the simplicity of the mid tones and dark tones used to portray the mood and the economy of the painting. There is a lot of rhythm with the pen strokes and the shadows are in a rhythmical movement. Truth be told.. it was hard.. Name:  Mucha-bouquet altogether.jpg
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    I'm nowhere qualified to make critiques on other's art. I'll give yours a whorl, because I really like the piece. Your sketch lines are phenomanal, and show you have some great control of the tools at hand. The only problem I have with them is the right shoulder of the model. That slight difference in the muscles, I feel, really prounounces the allure the original artist is portraying. The painting part feels as though you spent so much time on the sketching that you lost interest by the time you started painting. Maybe you were rushing the clock as it is the case with most of these assignments.

    The work is incredible, and I'm excited to see more of yours. Just slow down, and spend a little more time.
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    thank you so much for the advice ill surely use it for my next piece
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    Red face Anthony Van Dyck 1 hr

    I chose this painting because of the rhythm the hair makes against the flat black economy, making the portrait pop out. I loved his color scheme, focusing the bright lighting on her face, and surrounding the gray midtones of her hair to close her face, capturing our eyes to the center of the piece. Was hard to get the dry brush feel so I mixed it with a close to dry paint on mangastudio with a few pen marks. Name:  Anthony Van Dyck B&W combined.jpg
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    Love your choices! Something I've found super-helpful if you're using Photoshop is to use the grid feature (under View > Show: Grid, tick and untick 'Extras' to show, and you can change the settings under Preferences) to check proportion and distances. I don't [i]think[i] it counts as cheating considering Albrecht Dürer invented a machine to do the same thing. There's also a feature called smart guides that you can use to pull down individual lines from the ruler (if you have it active) that's basically the equivalent of putting a ruler across your screen to check distances.
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    Thankss, I think I will definitely do that next time
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    NC Wyeth Boat 1 hour 15 min

    I chose this painting because of the rhythm and texture of the skies and shapes it creates. The waves are in different length and sizes and so are the clouds. He used the negative space really well to show the largeness of the painting.. Unfortunately, I made the human a giant and the boat really tiny.. other than those mistakes I've discovered... any opinions and advices?Name:  nc wyeth boat Combined.jpg
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    Great job! I still think the boater::boat looks proportionate. Maybe it's the same shot just him 10 years older; and he got a job at a contruction site? HA! The only thing I can see is the range of dark to light value is a bit shorter than the original. Some of your strokes have a feeling of speed, but this may be a personal feeling. I don't know; I got no idea what i'm talking about! Keep it up, man!
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    i'll start with the disclaimer that i'm no expert. but hope my comments will help.

    looks really good as cswalker said the basic shapes are there. valuewise what i noticed is yours seems to be far brighter. the original doesn't have so much brightness. and also this contrast is what lead the eye to the boat boy. he head is very very light, and his clothes very dark against a fairly light to midtonish-background of the cloud.

    hope that helps. keep it up and look forward to seeing more. i'm doing this assignment as well!

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    i'll start with the disclaimer that i'm no expert. but hope my comments will help.

    looks really good as cswalker said the basic shapes are there. valuewise what i noticed is yours seems to be far brighter. the original doesn't have so much brightness. and also this contrast is what lead the eye to the boat boy. he head is very very light, and his clothes very dark against a fairly light to midtonish-background of the cloud.

    hope that helps. keep it up and look forward to seeing more. i'm doing this assignment as well!
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    Ok great to see where you are at. When you are first getting started it is very important to really focus in on the mapping out of your shapes as accurately as you can possibly get them. If you put a shape in the wrong place and commit you end up having the other shapes off and require fixing, which increases painting time. By taking just a few extra minutes early on to measure out your shapes, to compare your shapes, and be sure they are placed and drawn accurately will make the rest of the painting process, working out your values and edges, much much easier.

    You should flip the images horizontally and vertically so that you see the shapes with fresh eyes. This should be part of the process and if you are already doing that, keep doing it more. The professional artists will often flip images or use a mirror to see with fresh eyes as many as three or four times a minute as they are working when things really get flowing. You can also back away...actually get up and back away...and doing this works for shapes as well as checking values and edges.

    Keep up the good work.


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    I Chose this painting because he used a 2d background/poster to support the 3d model in front of us. IT really made the woman pop out and the fabric and the rhythm of the whole figure was really flowing. His use of black and whites were really played around with. This probably was really hard to draw because of the midtones and the darktones used. It was definitely a challenge and I did try to use the mirror reversing tactic any opinions or critiques?Name:  Corot woman.jpg
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    I'm nowhere near qualified to give critique, but I'll try. I think you've done nicely with capturing the elements in the painting. I see two basic problems. The values you use are too light when compared to the original painting on the skin and the background.

    The proportions are also somewhat off. The collar is too narrow and the left hand and shoulder show more under the shirt, yet the shirt on the left shoulder does not reach the edge of the painting as it does in the original. Your study is made on a much wider canvas than the original one so it's nearly imposible to get the proportions correct. You should make the study same size as the original one. I personally do it by copyibg the original into its own layer annd selecting layer content. This gives a selection with the right size. You can then either paint inside the selection or fill a layer and cut a whole in it with the selection and paint in layers underneath it.
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    watch the shape in the upper left. you went a little large there. great job on shapes other than that. the main thing at this point is to be more honest about what values you are using. you went much more high key so it seems like your levels are off. be sure you are getting your large value shapes right and you will see an immediate improvement.

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