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    Deepskysurfer - Composition 1.1

    Mikhail Vrubel is my favorite artist.
    ''The Swan Princess''
    i done it in 1 hour. please help me with your critique.
    cheers guys
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    The main thing that will improve this is just slowing down a little to double check all of your positive and negative shapes. mapping out your image accurately is key and you are so close that if you just bite down on that early step a little more that the rest is going to fall into place quickly. great job. you are on the right track. keep going. jm

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    thanks Jason for your useful comment. your advice about positive and negative space was very helpful.
    in this time i try to work better than before.
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    Walter Everett ... he is awesome !!
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    done in more than 4 hours.
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    amazing stuff. if you copy the layer, then do a blur on that, then erase the parts that are too blurred I bet you could get them perfect. still, amazing. wow.

    >>SKETCHBOOK. you'll visit me. I'll visit you, we'll have a tea party. with arts and shit. it'll be dreamy. stop by.
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    Nice work. You can get closer on values, but for just getting rolling these are looking good. Your shapes are coming along well.

    Be sure that you are keeping a close eye on your edges. Note where the sharpest sharpest sharps and softest soft edges are and use them as guideposts/landmarks for the rests of the edges in the image. Edges are important to space, form, and focal areas, so getting those in there will help the piece a lot. Once you do, you will see quality improve a lot.

    The bouguereau is closest, edge wise, but you have gone more crisp in the face.

    The one just prior your values in the background figure and animal are more contrasting than the original.

    I think moving forward I would most like to see you focus on being as consistent as you can be from image to image. That will be a big step.


    Keep up the great work. -jm

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    thanks a lot Jason for you advice.
    i tried to follow your critique on my previous works.
    here they are...
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    Wow, even closer on those last three! Your values and placement are awesome. The only thing I can notice is that sometimes, you paint the edges within the shapes a little bit too rough... like on the sitting lady and the horse. I think if you get those down you'd really nail these.

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    thanks a lot SerJef@ ..
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    I am tempted to pull you out of this assignment to put your attention in the later composition assignments, given you have taken such massive steps with process, and have your shapes, values, and edges very much under control. Your surfaces are coming along beautifully. However, i do think that you getting time with these master paintings is going to do you a lot of good in the long run.

    You are getting 99 percent there on all of your shapes, values and edges. At times you go with a little more contrast...just a little bit...like you did with the hair on the most recent. You are very very close. Given the goal of this assignment is not to make a forgery, but to study the compositions as well as work on painting skill, I would very much like to see some of your analysis on these paintings as related to the principles of design. Your painting skills are rocking and i believe your potential as a painter is pretty much unlimited if you continue to push like you are. I want to be sure you are keeping the principles of composition at the forefront of your mind as much as you are the process of painting.

    You have the painting part down well...no doubt you want to continue to grow there...but do please put some attention into doing analysis so we can discuss the finer points of composition since you give me so little to provide feedback on by doing such great studies

    We can then discuss composition more deeply. I look forward to it.


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    hello Jason
    thank you very much for motivation me by your energetic words and for check out my level up process.

    from this work now according to your saying, i'm going to analyze the master works of art history.
    my first analyzing work is ''Solomon_Ajax_and_Cassandra''.
    this work is in the low saturation branch. i tried to analyze clarity to principles of first video composition.
    1. emphasis and rhythm : the emphasis is on Ajax's face , Cassandra's body and back sculpture when cassandra's ashy for help.
    2.variety :
    2.1 in texture:like clothing and flowers
    2.2 in color:like man's body skin and woman.
    2.3 in forms: like circular form of bowl figure carving lines against straight and sharp lines in background.

    3. economy: like ajax's left leg which denied details and background simplify.
    4.repetition: repetition in drapery in flowers pattern and also in orange color in ajax's cover and flowers.
    5.continuity and movement: combination rhythm from bowl leg to Cassandra hand and the statue.
    6.balance: in color aspect flowers and the cover make balance sense in both side of the work.
    straight lines of back against the diagonal lines made a balance.
    i need your feedback to make me sure of my opinion.
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    awesome. That's great to see you thinking through these. Your observations are totally on point. Keep it up. The deep sky is the limit for you with this work ethic.

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