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    Unhappy Mother Bird - composition help please!

    Trying to push my comfort zone, doing a more complex peace.
    I'm stuck on composition at this point. Please help!

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    Also, here's a first colour scheme I thought of using.

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    I changed the composition. I think I'll go with this one.

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    He seems a little too far to the right. Or his other shoulder should be showing behind her head. Or something. Something bothers me about his position.

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    Give them a little bit more breathing room at the top there. They've got about three pixels of space between the top of their heads and the edge of the canvas/tree branch (?).

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    Thanks guys! I know there's something wrong with his pose, but at this moment I can't tell what.
    I'll let my eyes rest for the night and have a fresh look tomorrow.

    Two more steps. I removed the trees completely.

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    Is it the first compositional sketch you've come up with for it? If so, go back and do at least a dozen different takes on it, then pick the best one. Do the same with color. (No need to go into detail like plaid pattern on the shorts or the eyes; focus on blocking the whole silhouette in.)

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