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    Need some Critiques on Auren

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    DO NOT COPY, MODIFY, TRACE, REDISTRIBUTE, CLAIM AS YOUR OWN WITHOUT MY PRIOR PERMISSION PLEASE AND THANK YOU.

    This is Auren The Tempest Dragon, one of my main characters in Thera my Graphic novel.

    Anyways I will color this later and add a background to this piece.

    So before I color this or anything does it look Ok, are my dragon drawing skills good enough for a graphic novel?

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    Maaaaan, we ain't copying this.

    It looks flat though, like you kinda avoided foreshortening all together and sort of splayed him out like some sort of dragon rug. The wing doesn't look like its on the other side of his body, it looks like its jutting out of his chest.

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    I agree with J.R. You should fix the perspective of the wing on the other side. Another thing that bothers me is the anatomy of the back leg. It almost looks like it doesn't have anything to be attached to, or rather, it looks like it attaches too high up.

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    i don't know wtf these people are talking about. Looks good for line art to me.

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    While, I think the pose is not bad but the wing on the left, on the opposite side of the viewer looks small. That however could be because of the perspective issue mentioned by Harok and Hollis before, foreshortening will definitely help that issue. Also, I don't really care for the anatomy. You should reference dinosaur anatomy and lizards, http://browse.deviantart.com/resourc...der=9&q=lizard , and http://www.google.com/search?hl=en&b...mg.8TawqY3aE6U , Just to start.

    Furthermore, I hesitated to do a draw over/redline because you said " DO NOT COPY, MODIFY, TRACE, REDISTRIBUTE, CLAIM AS YOUR OWN WITHOUT MY PRIOR PERMISSION PLEASE AND THANK YOU." If you will allow me I won't mind doing a redline for you.

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    Can't say anything that hasn't already been said; I can, however, point you in the direction of some good resources specifically related to the problems with your piece:
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bljwvTWp7HI
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZSEdaK16j_E (you'll need to look up parts 2-5, although they should be in the related videos)

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    About the whole no tracing and yadda sorry for that It's kind of the same on deviantart, I've kind of become a bit paranoid since someone traced one of my things and filled it out as if it was a template without permission even after I stated that it was my personal character. So sorry for that heh.

    Basically I came here because Deviantart wasn't really helping me on how good is my stuff and what I could Improve on.

    Also he was meant to be kind of gliding with a slight tilt but I guess I kind of did it wrong 0-0

    @ J.R.Hollis >
    Thank you for pointing that out to me Hollis, I did kind of feel as if something was a bit icky about the left wing but liked the way it turned out, but thanks again for pointing that out so that I won't make the same mistake again, after all I'm trying to make these things look as believable and make myself better at making graphic novels 83.

    Also he does seem a bit flat...Well more practice for me.

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    Yes I have taken note of the wonky wing and I will take note about working on dragon legs and making them look more believable. Thanks for your Critique Reed.

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    Thanks for liking my art as it is glad to hear that someone likes my current art skills (But improving on them won't hurt, besides making some mistakes is part of the creative process.)

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    I would go with the perspective, It was meant to be a bit in the distance and slightly tilted but yeah I'm gonna be working on that so that I won't make the same mistakes gain. (Besides making a graphic novel with dragons means I will have to get used to this)

    Ah links 83 (Will take note of these (Mostly the dinosaur ones) and the colors on the lizards can help me out with realistic pallets later)

    And yes you may Redline it, I would really appreciate that Vayne.

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    Thanks for the links they where really helpful 83

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    I'm sorry it took so long.....

    My college work keeps me busy, like always. Well anyways here is the redline I promised you WINDAKI. I must say I had fun with it, I haven't drawn a dragon in years. I use to do it more when I was younger. OH and I kind went a little over board, I just hope it helps you. Or any one else who stumbles upon this thread.

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    Vayne, that's a sweet paintover, and I like the changes you made to the position of the legs and wings.

    To be honest, though, the rest of the changes seem like stylistic choices. Your dragon has more of a "fierce" look than the original, but the original seems like it would be appropriate for a narrative aimed at younger audiences. Also, simple linework is much easier to use for someone who's experimenting with their first graphic novel. Narrative storytelling has enough of it's own challenges, you don't want to be bogged down with a highly detailed rendering style (unless that's your thing, I guess.)

    To be clear, I'm not knocking your efforts at all. The anatomy bears a much closer resemblance to real reptiles and is certainly more believable with the proportion changes you've made. Just a style thing.

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    Better hire a lawyer Vayne. haha

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    JMarok: I understand . I just draw and a style pops out....LOl, Can't help that. Anyways, It is ultimately up to WINDAKI what to do from here with what has been said.

    J.R.Hollis LOL Yeah, Thats why I asked first.

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