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    Looking for harsh crits. Don't go easy on me...

    It's 2014 now and I'm updating this sketchbook. Forgive me. Please scroll near the bottom and see 2nd page for new stuff.

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    You're back, after such a long time? Really?....is it really you, young one?

    If you ever have any questions, or you want help, all you need to do is shoot me a message.
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    Not so young anymore. How's it going? I stopped for a while. Life can get pretty complicated and strange sometimes. Anyway, I'm back to work work work.

    Here's a quick one from tonight.

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    Another long time away. Did this tonight:

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    Another quick one. I got lazy on his right arm, but there we are. I'll move on now.

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    Watched Sin City tonight again, getting ready for the new movie. So, in that vein, here is a WIP and a finished piece. Took about 1hr 30:

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    Another quick one. I will try to do some more of these simple body/shape studies.

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    Here are a few quick ones of old faces. All under 20 mins each:

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    Looking for critic and guidence. Any tips, advice or put downs welcome

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    Blade Runner scene. Got a bit lost with this, but not too bad result.

    I need to remember where the light is coming from.

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    Try to spend more time on a single piece, it makes a big difference the extra time you put into it; and don't be scared of using color. Keep posting!

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    Cheers. I do get a bit impatient. I am sort of staying away from colour at the moment because I felt my understanding of light and shade wasn't strong enough yet. Maybe that's not the right thing to do at this stage?

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    Like Noah Bradley said : Start often, finish well. So continue doing a lot of quick studies, and from time to time, spend hours and hours on one!

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    More construction sketches:

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    Some more construction, most without reference as a test:

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    Advice and critiques welcomed.

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    I have given myself a new rule. to give a little bit of character to any figure I draw.

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    It feels like in your figure sketches your impatience is leading you to neglect proportion and scaling in terms of anatomical accuracy, I see a lot of torso's and legs out of sync with the rest of the body. It's fine too have expressive line work in the vein of someone like Egon Schiele, but it doesn't feel like your figures are composed cohesively and effectively. I would recommend slowing down and doing some more master studies interspersed between your own sketches, definitely look at Bridgman and copy his different approaches to constructing human anatomy. I think if you abstract the forms more and think in terms of blocks and negative space, you're figures will become much more solid and successful.
    In the black and white tonal paintings I think you have a good eye because I can tell that's supposed to be Bruce Willis, and capturing a likeness with little information can be challenging, but they all feel very clunky. Your lines and forms seem very round and globular, I think you would benefit from practicing breaking shapes down into sharp straight edges. If you want to continue painting with the aesthetic of flat tones look into either copying or doing your own linoleum or woodblock prints, look at how others utilize shape and composition to create a cohesive and effective balance in their images. It never hurts to cross train in different artistic disciplines.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Penhyll View Post
    It feels like in your figure sketches your impatience is leading you to neglect proportion and scaling in terms of anatomical accuracy, I see a lot of torso's and legs out of sync with the rest of the body. It's fine too have expressive line work in the vein of someone like Egon Schiele, but it doesn't feel like your figures are composed cohesively and effectively. I would recommend slowing down and doing some more master studies interspersed between your own sketches, definitely look at Bridgman and copy his different approaches to constructing human anatomy. I think if you abstract the forms more and think in terms of blocks and negative space, you're figures will become much more solid and successful.
    In the black and white tonal paintings I think you have a good eye because I can tell that's supposed to be Bruce Willis, and capturing a likeness with little information can be challenging, but they all feel very clunky. Your lines and forms seem very round and globular, I think you would benefit from practicing breaking shapes down into sharp straight edges. If you want to continue painting with the aesthetic of flat tones look into either copying or doing your own linoleum or woodblock prints, look at how others utilize shape and composition to create a cohesive and effective balance in their images. It never hurts to cross train in different artistic disciplines.
    Thank you for the advice, wise words Penhyll, I will take them on board. You will see an improvement next time you visit.

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    Hello Jack,
    I try to give Some feedback on one or two sketchbooks a week, so I picked yours now.
    anyway, the feedback is on the greyscale images. I really like them but there's 2 things I have questionnaires with:
    1. Why only hard edges? I understand this may be your choice, or a consequence of the speed you work with. But only consider it, it Will give you a larger repertoire of possibilities. If you decide to spend Some extra time on one of these sketches this might be something you can work with. Consider it and make a concious choice.
    2. The second item of feedback I see more of an error than a choice. The issue I have with these greyscale potraits is depth, in particular overlapping (as it's one of the few ways you have at your disposal with this combination of style and subject). What I mean is this: the way Some of your color zones overlap each other is different to what I would find normal. An example is the dark schade of the man with the hat versus highlight on his cheekbone. The lower part the dark schade overlaps and you get the impression it lies further forward than thelighter schade, while I feel they depiction the cheek Hollows which should lie further back. There are similar overlaps for instance under the hat or on the other Figures, and it confuses a bit. I believe with more consistent overlapping you'll get a better representation of the form.

    for the rest I do like what you're doing, so please go on. You don't have to take my word for it as I'm relatively new, but just consider it. Have fun

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    Thanks for the critiques Christof Simons. The reason why I was using hard edges, is because I don't know enough about light and value yet, so wanted to simplify what I was doing, hopefully making a mistake with value more obvioud for me to detect. The issues with "overlapping values", same reason. Just not quite there yet.

    Anyway, I did a few drawings tonight, from my imagination, and slowed right down, taking care and thought with each line. I considered the light source. I think the results are better.

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    Tru to use a specific direction of light. Look up Rembrandt lightning. It's three quarter lightning and it Will allowed you to better define your shadows. Now you have a sort of frontal lightning, but for instance I don't know how you get shading on both sides of the nose. Look before you draw, not just think where you are drawing

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    Sound advice. I didn't consider the light direction enough. Thanks.

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    Not sure if it's a style choice, but the eyes are very far apart most of your pencil sketches. Other than that I like it, very nice.

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    Its not intentional. I think I'm still drawing the eyes too far apart, but at least I am now aware of it. Trying to correct it. Thank you.

    Here are my latest drawings. Really trying to take my time and consider light and form/shapes.

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