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    Kinship card- help make it better...

    Here are some tubnails... help me chose 2 of the best so I can do more refined black and white ruffs... also plz crit and tell me what would you change... the more you write the more help it is... THX!

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    I got no replies :/ so I taught I'd post more thumbnails... plz I really need some feedback at least write two numbers that doesn't take that long...

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    As thumbnails go, they're too detailed, at least to my mind.
    However, I'd go with the first of the second set, but I'd move the wolf(?) behind him and make them more a 'team'
    While I like the dark against light, make sure you don't lose that when rendering, possibly having the wolf lit for balance.

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    if the idea is to show the fact that the man and the wolf are somehow linked or in a partnership, 4 and 5 get that across more clearly than some of the others, which could feel like the human is fighting the wolf. I like 5 for the fact it has some seen enemy and the duo feel like they're fighting against something as opposed to posing together and overall I prefer the ones with stronger overlap between the figures.

    Things you could consider to make them feel like a pairing is having them looking or facing in the same direction like they're both focused on the same thing, or having some kind of clothing/marking design that shows some kind of kinship, or having their poses echo or interact with each other.

    http://samhoggart.blogspot.co.uk/201...from-hunt.html kind of shows what I mean, though the action of looking in the same direction and touch.

    http://samhoggart.blogspot.co.uk/201...oul-spark.html shows the idea of linking them through a colour, and both are moving towards the same spot.

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    Venger and Zephyri: Thank you very much for you feedback!

    Based on your crits and some from other sites I made 2 b/w ruffs... I tried to use all the feedback and compile 2 images so I can now pick one witch I will take to a final render...

    The wolf and character designs are not shown here. I will be working on them while I wait for feedback... I will make them have matching colors, armor, glowing tattoos etc... It will be obvious that they are a team...

    So plz crit these 2 ruffs and tell me witch one to pick for my final illustration... THX!

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    ok here is the final ruff for the kinship card before I start rendering...
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    Nice duo I like your previous thumbmails.

    I'm not convinced by the way his leg is placed. The pose is very dynamic but because of the place he have in the picture, the anatomy feel cramped. I'm not sure the knee should be visible and the torso looks too short and massive by comparison.
    The arm at the left place, (the one on the foreground) need some refinement. The hand on the left looks very small and that confuse with the perspective you give to the other hand.
    The back of your character should be moving too, actually the armor do not reflect the twist the torso have and that confuse again with the anatomy I think...

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    Dude, I know you already started on the detailed rough but I would totally go back and use the first shot of the two you posted in post number 5 of this thread. The character standing in front of the wolf shot. This one looks way cooler than the one you picked to work on. It has possibilities for much more depth I think.

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    Finished the kinship card! Thx for the crits everyone!!!
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