I did this piece for an up-and-coming 'ghost' compilation book, I went with a more story-book style. It's close to being finished but it seems a little flat, maybe it needs more elements or a color change but I'm really not sure.
Critique and suggestions are greatly appreciated, I really want to make this stand out
For example: The neck being connected to the shoulder by a line on the blond girl, kind of flattens her out. The girl in the deepest part of the woods looks to be about the same value as the giggling girl.
Just my two cents.
I'll play around with adding more within the scene and see how re-drawing/ re-positioning the skeletons fares out
I'd strongly suggest zooming out so that we can see the main character in full figure. Right it's hard to tell exactly what she's doing. I realize she's supposed to be running and holding her skirt up out of the way, but it would be so much clearer if we could see her legs.
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ok, some very sloppy progress here. I've expanded the frame and showed a little bit more of the scene and changed a few things
As always, just my two cents.
But yes, I'll focus more on the woman and skeletons first and come back to the background and see if I can start with a cleaner slate.
It's unclear what this illo is supposed to be showing. There's skeletons, sure, but the girl looks happy to see them. She is in cheerful colours, her mouth is ambiguous, and because her hair covers her eyes you've lost all the cues you'd get from eyes and eyebrows. Her body language is fairly neutral. The ghosts are happy. But then... y'know. Spooky trees and skeletons.
If this is supposed to be cheerful, lose the dark shadows and cute-ify the skeletons. If it isn't, darken the girl so we don't think she's insane to be frolicking in the swamp with the dead. If she's supposed to be insane, indicate that in some way.
I went back and did a lot more work. Went with different colors and refined some elements. I'm sure I could push this further, but I am willing to walk away and start something fresh. Thanks for all your input and critique guys.