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    ANy ideas to improve it?

    Here is my last one. I feel it totally lack of punch. Any idea to improve it? The knight is not finished at allso you can ignore it.

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    That's because the light do not reflect nowhere The light is on top of the forest and water, think about it : the trees must have some edge touched by the light, the foliage should react to it too, the water must reflect something...

    You have a lot of smooth edge too in your painting, you need to make the rock and stairs with really harder edges, if not everything will fade. Do not be afraid of contrasts and use the lighting to push the center of interest.

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    http://perlbal.hi-pi.com/blog-images...dans-l-eau.jpg
    http://cdnimg.visualizeus.com/thumbs...57ae667a_h.jpg

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    I've made some corrections. What do you think?
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    this is much better. still, you should bring more of that blue light down to reflect , especially off the water. that's a pretty bright light, it's going to carry all over the place. Name:  journey_in_darkroot_garden_by_yinetyang-d5t2fg2.jpg
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    Agree it's better. You didn't choose an easy lighting, but don't be afraid to push contrast and let some things not really visible... Here some other things with references, hope it can help you

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    Quote Originally Posted by moonskittles View Post
    this is much better. still, you should bring more of that blue light down to reflect , especially off the water. that's a pretty bright light, it's going to carry all over the place. Name:  journey_in_darkroot_garden_by_yinetyang-d5t2fg2.jpg
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    Yes, I've been a little shy on light but I'm realising the mistake. What do you think of the knight. I feel there is something wrong with it. Do you agree?

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    [QUOTE=Griffonnage;3635894]Agree it's better. You didn't choose an easy lighting, but don't be afraid to push contrast and let some things not really visible... Here some other things with references, hope it can help you

    Thanks for diging up all those usueful references. I'll post a modified version when I'll have time to correct it.

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    A up stair like that would be look good in a symmetrical composition, for your image I would suggest a bit of zig zag stair.
    Also, the tree need a bit better lit with rimlight.

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    Here is the final(?) version with your improvements. Thank you so much guys for your help!

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    I encourage you to keep working on this piece. It has the makings of something nice. Just keep pushing the blue highlights on the trees, water and knight and I think it will really make them pop out more.

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    To me doesn't look like you've implemented others critiques. Make a copy of this one and then work on it by adding the stuff they told you. That way you won't have to worry about huge mistakes.

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