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    Would love some critique and feedback on this one

    Hello,

    I just finished a new painting.

    I would thank you if you could give me some feedback on this one.
    What I noticed already is that the wind wheels are not thin enough...

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    Don't use "hairy" lines. If you can't make a brushstroke that fits, either undo it and try again, or zoom in and make bigger strokes. Cables made of dozens of uncertain strokes look like a mess unraveled rope, not clean lines of hanging wires.

    The value range of this picture is extremely narrow - it's way too dark. You can suggest overcast sky without making everything dark gray; don't be afraid to use a wider value range.

    Overall, I'd say you should focus on drawing first. Leave painting for later. Leave digital medium for later. Work in pencil on paper.

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    needs a focal point, also the buildings seem wrong, how about eliminating the one by the tower and a more light in the windows on the building on the right, tone down the fans by this building
    dont forget the power lines fade in the distance and get smaller

    just a thought

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    i didnt really approach the composition issues mentioned above, maybe try lasooing stuff and moving it about on the page till the composition is working for you. but i liked the stormy atmosphere a lot! that eerie light is awesome!
    but see what you think maybe it will give you some ideas..

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    Hey, thanks everybody for the hints!

    @arenhaus: the thing is, with traditional media, especially ballpoint pen, I am much more comfortable drawing. It is a much directer feel and much easier to control the strokes. I still draw with pen and paper but I want to get used to the tablet as well. Also I want to learn how to use colors properly. If I focus all the time on pen&paper and never start with digital media, when should I get used to it?

    Now that I have a comparison, thanks to velocity kendall's drawing, I can get an idea what can be done out of a picture like that. With it as a reference, it is much easier to understand how the value range is just too narrow. It also seems like the proportions are just not right. All the fans are out of proportion and some in the foreground too saturated, in comparison to the houses and the tower.

    @Velocity Kendall: How did you get the grass to look like that? what kind of brushes do you use? The whole drawing looks great!

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    hello! i used a brush from one of these...
    http://www.pandemoniumart.net/brushes/
    i fund them a few months ago, installed them all and use about 4 of them... takes a while to get used to them i suspect. but theres some handy ones in there, like the cloud and smoke ones..

    tbh i mostly use the standard hard round opacity jitter brush tho.

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    WHoa VK, now that is one cool overpaint .

    I just took a break to post this.
    But sometimes I also draw stuff
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