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    critiques much appreciated

    This is a fairly recent one, either finished or almost finished. Mixed media on panel (claybord).

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    the light from the train to the face and arm needs to be adjusted more intense

    the values on the mans back side can also be adjusted ,darker on his rump ,
    this should bring out the emotion
    so to sum up the values lighter on the train side and darker on the back of the man
    also train tracks are needed to show destination

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    I see what you mean about the light, thanks!

    About the train tracks, I did not put any in because he is in a prison yard and the train is imaginary, referencing the old song "Midnight Special.

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    how about a hint of tracks just before the train and fading towards the man
    just a thought

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    Very cool idea, thanks!

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    If it's imaginary, would it be worth having some effect to indicate that? Something a bit unusual about the train to show it's different, like glowing or airy or brightly saturated or desaturated (depending on mood). Just a thought.

    It also looks a bit small compared to the shadow nearest which looks to me like a human's shadow. Could add some other inmates for scale and to help with immediate recognition that it's a prison yard.

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    More good ideas, thanks! I'm thinking too, there should be a guard in the tower.

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