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    Anemos Dream Night Sky

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    This work is one of my better nudes. This is a 69"x41" oil painting. The black and white was done using drybrush and oil. The graffiti was done by a "street" artist named SKITZO, he did the graffiti using oil pastel, liquin, turpentine, and oil paints. The biggest criticism i get from this piece is the contrast between the Nude and the Wall comes off as out of place, or unfinished. What can I do to finish it?

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    I can't say what you can do to finish it - I'm inexperienced at oil painting. However, there is definitely something not quite right with the right arm. The shoulder seems unusually placed, and the elbow and the lighting on it make it seem sort of backwards. It's also difficult to determine just how long it is. Also, is she standing in water? If so, the bit of the toga/drape/cloth that's floating on it should be darker in color in spots.

    Otherwise, great piece! I love the mood.

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    PS: The double post bug is annoying.

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    Her shouler seems dislocated and I would agree with how the colors work here.

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    Thank you for the advice. She's sinking into concrete as if it were water. Im going to add more shadows to the wall, and the floor, lighten up the elbow.

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    Wait a minute! is that dark spot on her arm her elbow or her arm crease? Because if it is supposed to be her elbow that arm is even worse than I thought.

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    I like the idea of shadow being added. There is a problem with the elbow area, I did not mean for it to come off as an elbow, its just a bit too dark. Thank you for pointing that out to me.

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    The figurative aspects of the nude, form and muscle groups are almost perfect. The elbow "area" is not intended to be an elbow, use your eyes please. Here's the original photograph. Name:  elbow2.jpg
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    Quote Originally Posted by Wroeththo View Post
    The biggest criticism i get from this piece is the contrast between the Nude and the Wall comes off as out of place, or unfinished. What can I do to finish it?
    You haven't been getting the proper critique. It is an interesting concept but the anatomy, pose, proportions, composition, color, light, etc. are very poorly executed. It's a bit unfortunate because this could be a really interesting piece. My advice would be to really work out the problems in those areas first through good studies and thumbnails and start with a fresh painting.

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