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    Poster thing...help before I print it

    So I'm planning on printing this thing that I did for an English project just because I like it, but I'd appreciate some critique before I print a final. I know the lettering is a bit off so I'll fix that but any other comments on stuff I need to polish up? Even any bigger changes would be helpful for the future even if I don't incorporate it in this one.
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    Oh man, do you really need six fonts? It just looks like like a visual mess (is that a random, badly placed drop shadow I spy there) and like you just found out fonts exist and now you have to use all of them, like beginners who find Photoshop brushes the first time.
    All of the text is placed so tightly too, there's no room in the image, just huge block of text and some image squeezed in there, and that specific font for the last part is really hard for me to read, as it looks elongated. Same with the first parts too actually, why is "no peace" flattened, but "no future" is not? It just comes off random.

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    One font. Because otherwise you go to Graphic Design Hell.


    The different fonts make the sentence look like different things, now it reads:


    "There is no peace,
    no future.


    In violence the just world we wish to leave for the children of the future.


    Can be found only


    in non-violence"

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    Ahhh I see your points... wow yes the text is ASDFGHJKL. Yyyyyyeah I definitely need to learn some graphic design...
    Any suggestions on what I should do with the placement in place of the current one (that was yes, randomly done to be honest and I am totally lost)? I sort of did the drawing part and then threw on the text thoughtlessly .___.
    And that's not a drop shadow, it's even worse so erm let's just pretend that never happened...

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    I'm also thinking I should take out some of the wordiness and have
    "NONVIOLENCE

    THERE IS
    NO PEACE
    NO FUTURE
    IN VIOLENCE"
    instead possibly?

    And do you think I should keep the weird long shape or should I make it more standard rectangle looking? Blah sorry I have no idea what the terminology for any of this stuff would be.

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    Well... to be honest now it looks like one of those cheesy bible group posters, especially since the image is so vague (like it has zero pointers about time, the kid's clothes could just as easily be from the middle ages or a common t-shirt and the things in the background could a modern building or the tower of babylon but the colours etc make it look really old) and all the ancient stone borders just add to that, same as the less time-specific text. Like the original spoke about the children of the future, but this could just say that the present is already screwed.
    In the first version the text was the main point and the image just added some flavor to it, but now the image is the thing that's supposed to keep the poster up as it's the first thing you see, but in my opinion it's not strong enough to get the message across alone.

    Also for a print that might be bit awkward shape. Personally I'd try something like this:
    FOR THE CHILDREN OF THE FUTURE
    *kid image*
    THERE is NO FUTURE IN VIOLENCE

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    Okay I changed the font so that it looks less...old/churchy but now I'm not sure it's readable and if the bold/not bold actually helps or takes away from it.
    I also made the border thing a bit darker which I hope makes it look less old?
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    Looks pretty ok after changing the fonts!
    But i like the first before changing the fonts

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    Well I think that's a definitive improvement, and probably the best you can do without starting to re-do the actual pic.

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    For the just world

    leave our children

    in violence.

    That's all I see because the bold takes away from the 'there's no future'.

    Almost subliminally saying you WANT to leave the children in a violent world.

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    Ahh I totally didn't think of that...
    blah I'm so stuck on how to word this while still having it look nice and asdfghjkl
    I was feeling a bit uncertain about leaving the word nonviolence out of the text, so maybe this is better?:
    Which version is better? Does the bold actually add anything to it or is it random?
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    Looking at it, I'm starting to toward the all bold one, the second one more, but maybe that's just me.

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    I think that having all bold fonts really overwhelms your image. The "NONVIOLENCE IS THE ONLY WAY" treatment of the first one looks really good, I'd stick to that and mess around with the top a bit more - maybe try leaving only the top or the bottom line of that part in bold and use regular weight for the rest?

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    Post just the art, and let some of the folks here take a shot at it.

    We've done it before.

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    Still fiddling with the top fonts but I do agree the "NONVIOLENCE IS THE ONLY WAY" looks better on the first one.
    Here's just the art. There are a lot of areas that are pretty weak so any feedback would be nice.
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