You'r work doesnt have depth at all, you need to increase the contrast on the things that are closer to the viewer, make it darker and more saturated, and do the opposite for whats farther away from the viewer, i would study loomis heads n hands book, you need to learn about the plane changes in the face to make for a more succesful piece.
hope it helps.
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i like the direction your headed, i see potential that you will continue to get better. if i were to try to help, id say focus on your work from a distance more, i see you put in nice,small details, but im saying put in larger details to give it more form, so it doesnt look so flat. i hope i have explained my thought clearly and it helps you. keep it up!