I'm after any constructive critique for my university project.

I'm working on a previous challenge from cghub :- http:///forum/showthread.php?t=10677

And this is the paragraph I've decided to do:-
Kingdom Branae: Sitting to the North West this kingdom escapes the worst of the bitter weather that freezes its neighbour but the climate is very wet and rainy most of the year round. The rain that falls here supplies the river basin with an almost constant supply. These people have clothes, structures and animals that can survive a boggy, misty terrain. They recognise no god but believe in spirits and as such have a great many talismans, amulets and trinkets that adorn almost all of their possessions and clothes.

I hope I can get any suggestions off you as well.