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    Mock Bookcover need crit

    This is the last of a series of mock bookcovers I'm doing for thesis. I'm kind of sick of it, and I need some help pushing it. The figure in the foreground is unfinished and the text is just filler text. Any crits definitely welcome.

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    Why is the ghost guy facing away from the person?(since he's probably the reason they are on the floor)bring him close to the person on the floor.Also I don't like how how the grass is placed on the pavement..it just looks off to me,by that I mean that it unnatural in a graveyard.

    What references did you use for the figures?Did you plan this out with thumbnails?

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    Are the dead person and the ghost the same person? There's no interaction between them, and thus it's hard to discern their relationship.

    Also, butt. (I mean, is that camera angle REALLY necessary?)

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    One of the few hard and fast rules of composition: Thou shall not put a giant ass in the lower right-hand corner. Don't ask me why, it's just a rule.

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    yeah the corner-ass isn't doin it for the piece. Also if you are going to use imported textures avoid leaving them unaltered. Painting over them or picking out details that you think will enhance the piece is much better than just warping them and leaving it at that. I'd bring that blue into the other character and the ground too, it's bright enough that it will be affecting almost everything to some extent, plus it will tie things together a little better.

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    Lol besides the compositional no no of the butt , I would also try the move the figure away from being dead center in the middle of the frame to make the piece more interesting. Also, to me the foot shapes comes of a bit wonky.

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    Back to thumbnails...


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    I think "Also, butt." is my favorite critique of all time.

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    To be a bit more constructive, I don't think there's anything really "wrong" here (other than the previously-noticed compositional hindquarter issue.) The main problem is that you've obviously drawn it all out of your head and everything is sort of off by 10%. You might be able to get away with that if this were one panel in a longer comic, but as a bookcover it just doesn't cut it. I'd stick with the basic composition (again, losing the butt-shot) and color scheme, which I think are good--but I'd also find some photo reference for the figure, the tree, and the stone wall in the background--and basically start from scratch on all three of those things.

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    Here's an update on how it looks now. Thanks for all the crit guys. Still working on it, but unfortunately it's a bit late to start over. Hopefully some of the accessories toned down the assular region a bit. I can now say I have learned my lesson about asses in composition haha. I also always planned on painting on the cobblestone texture although I think it needs pushed more, and I was hoping to redraw the head so you could see the side of her face and ears so there was more interaction there. Thanks again though. I learned a lot from working on this.

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    You mentioned this is your thesis project, where are you going to school?


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