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    Young Wizard

    Here is a first pencil draft of a character design for a comic that I am begining to write. It's the first draft of the main character. I am looking for critique of the general drawing before I start making model sheets and storyboards of him and the other characters. He is a young man who is gradually learning to be a wizard with a stolen spellbook (that he keeps hidden in his bag) while hiding from the actual owners of the book in question.

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    Are his sleeves supposed to be different from each other (the other long and wide, the other short and not so wide)? Also the buckle and the bag seem to be going totally different directions which just looks off, and the hem of the robe looks pretty unreferenced. Overall to my eye the designs is pretty plain and not really that of a guy "on the run", though admittedly I don't know in what sort of run he is in or where (supplies, weather, mode of transportation) or if this is the only costume he's wearing (as in someone who's running from people looking specifically him probably wouldn't wear the same clothes all the time, unless that robe is the basic clothes everyone wears) and I do wonder a bit what exactly is keeping his collar up like that (aside willing suspension of disbelief).

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    Yeah. I agree with you about the sleeves and the buckle. I'll correct those to make a new version with a reworked costume. (But I will probably leave the collar even if it's unrealistic )

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    My question is he attending a wizarding school, how come he already has wizarding garb? If he has stolen the book from wizards what was his profession before and what would he be wearing then. My first thought from the title and the image without reading the description is "Oh it is a boy studying magic at an institution" not "Oh he is a rogue wizard learning on his own." as for the collar I think it is alright for the anime kind of style you are going for, it fits the genre but it flows into the clothing a little strange and I do agree a lot with Tinybird that if he is on the run maybe he wouldn't wear such obvious clothing. I would say throw up some style ideas, some rough action poses to gives us a feel for the comic in general. Let us see the enviorment he is in. Obviously it is in a fanstasy world so we may both be wrong and this is the general clothing of everyone.

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    His head seems somewhat small for all that robe.

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    Yes, he has a tiny, tiny, tiny head.


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    Seriously tiny. Here, I both scaled the head and transformed it so that his hair/cranium aren't so hugely oversized.

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    THank you very much for all your replies everyone. Especially Elwell for taking the time to make me a paintover
    This head problem seems to be recurring when I draw from imagination. I will try extra hard to get it right next time.
    As for the story, I have a geenral outiline of it in my head right now but I will start writing it this weekend to try and work ot the stuff I'm not sure about. I just felt like getting some opinions of the character before. I will work the things mentionned about the costume as well depending on a few story elements I need to work out, but I agree that, in the direction I was planning on heading, the wizardish costume might be to early into the story.
    I will post a new version taking into consideration your comments shortly.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Sarc View Post
    This head problem seems to be recurring when I draw from imagination. I will try extra hard to get it right next time.
    Two things you can do:
    - Always draw the whole body, even the parts that people won't be seeing.
    - After you've drawn the thing from your imagination, check it against reference. Especially if you already have an idea of the mistakes you tend to make.

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    Here is a new version:
    I made the character look a bit younger and tried to correct the head problem. I made his costume less extravagant conscidering Tinybird and Marky Marq's comments since he technially isn't a wizard yet and it might fit better so start him off with a more civilian fantasy'ish costume.

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    I will post some other characters and environments as well as mode poses as I make them, as well as some comic pages after i'm done with the story.

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    Again the head is a bit too small and that neck is miles too long. Usually breeches like that finish just below the knee and the crotch a bit higher. At the moment it looks like he magically farted to fill them with gas. Research more on old garb.


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    Good improvement, just throwing some ideas out there but the book could be moving inside its case/ glowing therefore increasing the chance of him getting caught which would add more.. 'tension' ( I probably thought of this because I watched Jumanji the other day). His left arm/ hand could be on the case too, showing hes really holding onto it. Just work more on your anatomy before you fully go ahead with this project, I'll save you a lot of time.

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