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    Hi guys,

    This is a planet somewhere in the universe.
    The city in the back is getting hit by sandstorm.
    The city is empty.

    any critique welcome

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    is it supposed to be a matte painting? if so you should work in the photos better. and the fact that the texture of the rock is contrary to the painted rock is not helping at all.
    you probably need more basics and stuff before you go and do matte painting.

    if it's not supposed to be a matte painting.... get rid of the photos and paint what you want by hand. once you reach the level you can paint the stuff you want by hand you can add textures for more realism/detail/time/whatever.

    and you should make the city and the sandstorm more visible/ easier to read if thats some part of the story of your painting.

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    tried to make the city and sandstorm more visible

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    Is he standing on a rock or a spaceship? If it's a rock, what's with the parallel horizontal lines? If it's a spaceship, what's up with the irregular, rock-like forms?

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    It's a Rock/Cliff

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    Hi matey

    I like the idea, but I think the weakness in the image is in the composition and the use of decent reference materials, I shall elaborate.......

    The composition first, and bear in mind that this is just my opinion and you can ignore it, tell me to swivel on it or take notice of it as you see fit, I wont be offended in the slightest, ok!?

    The composition would be better if the guy on the rocks was looking down onto the city in a valley or a open plain so that we can see what he is looking at, at the moment you look at a huge lump of rock with a tiny guy on it and there is a little afterthought of city to the right. The composition is lacking a narrative or story as it is at the moment I look at it and I dont know what you are telling me. Is the guy watching it burn, trying to get home or scouting for an attack or salvage mission.

    Reference - Buildings look uneven and confused, they also lack depth as there is just one row of skyscrapers with nothing behind or in front of them.
    Rock texture is all but missing.
    Sky needs help with cloud layers and light.
    sand storm looks like rising smoke from a fire or some such event.
    All of the above need to be referenced in detail if you want to really sell this as a matte painting or just a good sci fi painting.

    I think you need to plan things out more and get an idea firmly in your head before you put pen to paper, decide what you want to show us and then decide how best to show us whatever it is.
    An image must make sense if you want people to look and look again as you are telling a story without using words, sometimes you have to be obvious if its a complicated theme or if its a subtle thing you can be less obvious. Either way it needs to be solid and convincing.

    I really hope this helps you out, and I hope you carry on and blow our socks off with a kick ass image, good luck and all the best.

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    I seems like you have two different styles in the image: the foreground and the city in the background. The rocks are very strong and definite, whereas the city is sketchy and dreamy. It creates a dissonance.

    Theres something I like about the rocks, but I think if you did the whole thing in one style i think it would look more coherent.

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    I changed the city completly there is no sandstorm anylonger.

    Now im trying to work on the rocks a bit more.

    Am I going in the right direction?

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    Updated oct. 13th

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    You still havnt looked at it from a story point of view!
    whats the guy doing?
    how did he get up on that huge featureless rock thing?
    why is he looking at the city?
    I still think that there is too much rock, not enough city and no narrative to the image!

    Sorry!

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    Try darkening the city a lot more and have one light in a window - now you have a story.


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