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    Abandoned shack

    Feels a little bland and empty to me...looking for constructive crits and suggestions, thanks.

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    I really like this piece.

    My eyes kept getting drawn to the chairs however. I think their clean lines and surfaces
    are taking away from the rest of the picture.

    I like the idea of the empty chair facing the window, the one on its side? I dont know so
    much. A chair on its side is always a sign of something wrong/out of place so in that sense
    it fits, but perhaps try removing it? More space might help with the feeling of abandonment.

    Good work.

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    HI matey

    I really like this one too, and the only thing that I would change is the light coming through the door!
    for my money it needs to be at the same angle as the light from the window looking at it as it is now it looks a bit odd to me.

    looking good mate, thanks for posting

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    OOO me like..

    I'm with Star Eater, I think if you remove the left hand chair, and roughen the lines of the chair to match the boards across the window it will look nice

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    I really like where this is so far. Both Star Eater and Lightship make the main points that I would make. If you follow their suggestions I think you would be onto something a lot better. I would also suggest you tone down the light coming through the door and mute it somewhat (after correcting the direction). At the moment you have two very strong sources of attention that draw the eye (the upright chair and the boxes and table edge to the left) and are at odds with one another - particularly as there's no colour to inject subtle variation and help ease the viewer in any particular direction.

    I would use the light direction of the window to inform the whole image, and mute a lot of detail in other areas that wouldn't be lit, like the picture and forceful vertical break of the wall. I love the use of the vertical break, but it's too well defined and detailed for me to sit well within the composition. You might also want to defuse some of those hard edges in shadow areas to help with the overall balance and eventual focus.

    Hope this helps. Really nice so far.

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    Thank you all for replying, i am grateful for the input. I can definitely see how correcting the light coming through the openings and changing some of the line quality would help it read. I'll keep at it and make some corrections, thanks again.

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    Kinda looks like two images combined, doesn't it?

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    If you're going to keep both the chairs in the picture, have a look at their thickness. The one laying on it's side looks a lot longer/slimmer.

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