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    Finally finished this (moved from FF)

    So I've been working on this for some time and I just finished it today. I'm basically curious to know what people think of it. Thoughts and comments appreciated.

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    I'm not sure why this was moved into this thread without my will but that's complete crap. I originally put it in the It's Finally Finished section because that's where I feel it should go. So why was this moved here?

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    I didn't think it was possible to be called an artist when you have nothing to say. It's like being a writer who publishes individual words as books and expects to be praised for it.
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    I did read them before posting. I felt what I did was at an intermediate level. That's why I posted it in the It's Finally Finished Section.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Istmin52 View Post
    I felt what I did was at an intermediate level. That's why I posted it in the It's Finally Finished Section.
    "Intermediate level" work doesn't belong in FF, either.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Elwell View Post
    "Intermediate level" work doesn't belong in FF, either.
    Unfortunately, Jason Manley's first line in the FF rule thread reads: "The finished section is now for intermediate and professional level works".
    This is basically what's been holding me back reporting stuff for being not good enough.

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    Your picture is unpolished (btw I didn't move it, but I agree with the decision), the composition is very loose, the girl is floating, shadows are almost non-existent. The idea is amusing, but that's all.


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    Have to agree with Blackspot. Everything looks to quickly painted, like this were a rough draft. The woman's body or hand aren't touching the ground, her hair is too stiff, and the towel is to thin (it looks more like sheet). The shadows aren't blended well and the shapes and edges aren't well defined. For example, the toilet looks like it's melting, not like it has a round dome at the bottom. The bathroom looks huge and very empty as well.

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    Thank you for the advice. I thought the shadows were good and that the woman wasn't floating. It doesn't look like that to me.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Istmin52 View Post
    Thank you for the advice. I thought the shadows were good and that the woman wasn't floating. It doesn't look like that to me.
    That's why things get posted here, so other people can point out the mistakes you may be blind to (whether that's caused by lack of skill or just staring the image too long).

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    The woman looks like she's floating because there is no occlusion shadow under her, especially where her hand is touching the floor. (This will explain what that is http://conceptart.org/forums/showthr...n-and-try-some ) Looking again, I did notice the woman's shadow, but it is way to light to be noticed right away.

    I think you might be confusing blending your brush strokes with transitioning your lights to your darks. In the link above, it shows how light transitions into shadow, and there is a fairly stark difference between the two when under direct light (it blends more gradually under diffuse light). Some of your transitions from light to dark aren't bad, but when you get to the shadows, you don't blend them and the individual brush strokes are visible (same can be said for your lights). I'd really recommend you do some still life with clear light to shadow transition, and work on your gradation and defining solid form.

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    The perspective is messed up. The toilet looks like it's tilted towards us; the towel rack's vanishing point is apparently somewhere in the floor; the bottom of the blinds, the toilet tank and the floor (which should all be parallel) wander off to different vanishing points, and that's just what I see from a casual glance. Pick a horizon and stick to it!

    Also, the staging is boring. There is no drama or emotion in this scene, apart from the bug-eyed expression the girl has. The medium camera shot emphasizes nothing. These might as well be action figures. Figure out what is important in this picture and emphasize it. Make it bigger, assign it more importance. I'm usually a fan of negative space but here it's really working against you because it looks like the girl has plenty of space to get away.

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    Thank you all for your comments.

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