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    Cow Flsh bowl Critique

    Hi guys, I hope some you have good suggestions on what to do better/different.

    I basically tried to render in a more realistic way. Let's just pretend that the focus point is fine and the eye follows the tail to the head

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    Make the image smaller.
    My problems with that are that there's no round form to the tail, the flat and cartoony scale texture makes sure of that, (remember that sometimes less is more and realism doesn't come from drawing every single hair, scale or whatever separately) and makes it both harder to figure out the point of attention, and that there's no depth to the tail's pose either. I can't see how far away the tip of the tail is from the body.
    The muscles in the body look pretty cartoony and there's no weight to him (as in, if you press you arm like that, the flesh and fat tissue will give under the pressure, which cues the viewer that these two things [rail and arm] are touching as the arm is reacting) and his head is pretty large, giving him child-ish proportions.

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    Judging by the hair and how the chin is rather short, it looks like he's tilting his head forward, but we still see his nostrils, and the distance between eyes and eyebrows is a bit large. Also, his eyes are a bit too large?

    A couple of other observations: I don't get the impression that he's in a bowl, rather than a square tank, which makes the enlargement of his submerged body seem like too much.

    His forearms start to look very large when the head is shrinked. I think you meant for the forearms to look "stretched" when resting on the edge of the tank, but it doesn't come quite across as it is.

    His fingers are very narrow for someone who uses them to swim around. Make them broader or maybe webbed?

    Lastly, the sign on the right quickly becomes unreadable at smaller sizes. Maybe make it a bit brighter and clearer to read, or maybe larger?

    I did a bit of rough photoshopping to show a few of my points, hope you don't mind. You're a lot better than me at this, but I hope my thoughts can be to some help anyway.

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    Thanks to both of you, the feedback is very usefull. I will work over this with the things you mentioned. It's great, thanks!

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    Fixed

    I took all of your feedback into consideration, this is what I have - I think your advice helped a lot. Thanks again for taking your time to critique.

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