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    The legacy of Niall Sketchbook (webcomic)

    I'm honestly not sure if this is the right place for this thread. I don't want to post all 39 of my pages so I thought it would be easier to just link my site. Tell me if this is the wrong place. Or just give me feedback of what you think.
    It starts on the most recent page. I suck at wordpress.

    http://ardencecomics.com/

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    some doodles i guess.

    here are some of my doodles. A lot are related to my comic that i linked in the previous post.

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    I think that the first sketch you posted is the easiest one for me to look at because the anatomy in that one is the best compared to your other sketches. I understand you're going for a stylized look but from my view point your anatomy is less stylized and just looks very inconsistent and that just pulls me away from looking at the design.

    For example, in that last sketch the first thing I noticed was that his arms were too long and his torso and legs look squished.

    I had a look at your comic and I hate to say this but your environments need a lot of work. The coloring is very muddy. I converted one to grey scale and you can see that there is little to no variety in tone in the background and I can't tell where the light is coming from.

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    Your figures in this strip are also really static, which is not good, especially for a punch scene like this.

    I'm sorry if I'm being too blunt but this is what I think so far. As far as improving, I can only recommend doing a LOT of studies for anatomy and environments.

    Andrew Loomis, Burne Hogarth and George Bridgman have some really good books that make for great studies and most of them are available online for free. They are a great help to any artist.

    As for environments, I would recommend studying landscapes and environments around you and sketching them out.

    Hope the feedback helps

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    thanks

    thanks for the reply! yeah, this is just how i doodle my characters.Personally, I think that the figure in my first post has worse anatomy than the others. His legs look awful. if you apply actual anatomy foundations to them you could see that his knees and calves don't match up. I do have a section of Hogath studies and some figure drawing class work. perhaps ill upload those next...if I could ever get around to scanning something -.-
    I would appreicate hearing more people's perspectives on this subject!

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    some older stuff

    Bare in mind that these are old....but this IS a sketch book. So i'm not afraid to show you older stuff....like lol this shit is two years old.

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    Also

    Also, any comments about my webcomic should talk as if it were one entity of work. Quality for individual posts varies.

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    I gotta say that I completely agree with *Kanda: Your anatomy and the environments need alot of work. Also are the outlines of everything you've psoted so far -including the comic- extremely uneven to the point of downright messyness. It's not pretty, to say the least, so you should sit down and practice those things.

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    Heyriel

    Heyriel, Simply agreeing with the person above and acting like their words are your own isn't productive. Personally I feel your addition of just saying my work is messy is offensive. Perhaps you should learn to make constructive feedback if you are going to post on an art forum. I am pleased that you commented but you should really educate yourself on the basics of critique.

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    m-.l

    these are some more character doodles

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    reptile

    reptile quick painting 45 minutes

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    another character

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    spenttime?

    I found this in a psd called "spenttime" lol wtf?

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    another oldy

    Too be honest. I enjoy line work way more than painting.

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    black n white

    black and white concept

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    map idea

    basic map concept for The Legacy Of Niall. It is obvious what I based it off of. I haven't labeled alot of the areas and drawn much in it. but you will see progress in time. THE WORLD WILL NOT BE CALLED ALDERMOURNE....EEEW need a new name. any suggestions...

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    city concept

    comic city concept

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    Hey man, I'd say it's best for you to pick back up with the studies, especially if you're making a comic. I think a solid grasp on anatomy is really, uhm, essential. Anyway keep going man.

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    idk

    Well I think what people struggle to understand is that my comic is my study.

    Comics are not entirely about the line art or painting. believe me. you can make a comic with just two circles.

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    figures

    I did these in like 2008.

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    oldershit

    Did this in like 2009

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    Critique on a Comic and Responses



    I tried to read your comic, I really did. But as I stated earlier, it is very hard to look at your work when art errors are abundant. You may say that comics are not about the line art or the painting but you're wrong. Because if that were the case then you may as well just read a book. NO ONE wants to read a comic with shitty art, because no matter how good the story is, that will not compensate for shit. (I would like to point out your comic has potential, the execution just needs work).

    Yes, as you stated before, you can make a comic using two circles...but that doesn't make it a GOOD comic does it? Case in point:

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    Sorry, the internet has a tendency to bring out the snarky side of my personality.

    Now, despite my earlier comment I did read your comic from start to finish and at the start you had already broken the number ONE rule for both comics and storytelling: SHOW, DON'T TELL

    Your character Owen saved the girl's life by making a cube and rather than have a character explain how he did it IN STORY you created the equivalent of an Author's Note in a fan fiction which breaks the flow of the story.

    That's really all I have to say on the topic of your comic at this point.

    Now, moving on to the irony of your response to Heyriel. The irony in this is that she is right. Your line work is very shaky, for lack of a better word. Look at this lineart done by X-Arielle

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    and compare it to yours. See the difference?

    Now, if you've made it this far into the post, congratulations, because I have some good news. Your old studies and comic city concept are the best things you've posted in this thread and I'd personally like to see more work like that from you. But hey, in the end it's your choice what you draw. So for now I bid you good luck

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    yeah

    I respect your responses. I really do. You don't a buy a webcomic though. Plus not everyone thinks the line art you used as an example is "good". I can tell that you semi-know what you are talking about but listen.

    http://www.mspaintadventures.com/

    Homestuck is one of the most highly rated and cosplayed webcomis on the internet.

    Most of the work will probably be considered "shity" by your standards.

    I'm glad you pointed out the artist note. I'm not sure I liked it either. Although I have about 40,000 more weekly posts that will surely give readers what they want.

    I dare you to read homestuck to act 2. Your close minded opinions will change.

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    I realized my error just a few seconds before you responded and edited to clarify my point properly.

    And I have read Homestuck and the main difference between your comic and Homestuck is that Homestuck is an interactive comic, and the line art and style in Homestuck is still more consistent than yours, but I digress, and that stylization COMPLEMENTS that format and story. Your comic, on the other hand, is not interactive, it is a fantasy story and the stylization just comes off as anatomical errors and makes it difficult to read.

    My opinions still haven't changed, but for now I think it's best that we just agree to disagree, yeah?

    I've bookmarked your comic by the way because I do think that it does have potential and I'd really like to see you get better with time and I'd like to see when you work in the comic city concept that you posted earlier

    I'd also like to apologize because I can be very blunt over the internet.

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