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    port – scifi environment – needs crits

    done after the tutorial 'from abstraction to production' from aaron limonick:

    http://www.thegnomonworkshop.com/sto...n#.UBQ_wEImWYI

    the goal was to create a picture on the base of an ink-splatter picture (included) and to try to stick with it, to keep the energy and a painterly feeling...

    totally out of my comfort zone...

    as always – i would appreciate some critique – if you can spare some time...

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    images aren't showing up

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    i can see them again - i think conceptart.org had some problems...

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    Nice work...all the forms read clearly and your use of detail to create scale and making the forms convincing is very well done.

    I suppose my main critique is that it feels kind of "generic sci-fi spaceport" overall. The design of the architecture is, I think, important in making it feel like an actual concept and not like you're just stepping through a tutorial....if it were me, I'd think less on the next one about "painterly feeling" and "energy" and more about "what kind of place is this?" and "how is it specifically different from other spaceports?" (The guns seem to suggest it's some kind of military installation, but it's hard to see how they could be of much use down in the hole like that.)

    Just my random thoughts.

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    thank you for taking the time!

    yes you are totally right. the most important thing that i learned from this tutorial is that i will not do the composition by chance again. the story is really something i will concentrate on more in the future - i'm still quite new to concept art - and there is so much to concentrate on

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    Overall, I think it shows you're on the right track. I see the foreground is a little sharper, and the background a little softer. I think amplifying this would be even better, but I'm glad you didn't ignore it. That, and playing with the warm and cool tones, would help separate the back from the front, giving the whole thing more depth.
    The main element I'm not fond of, are the hard white outlines on the gun barrels and steel girders. They are too stiff, and don't blend at all, which makes the items in question look cartoony.
    I think the single biggest influence on the way I approach sci-fi, and one of my favorite artists in the game, is John Harris. You can get his book on Amazon-I highly recommend it.
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    thank you so much! i'm (trying to) getting more brave with every image...
    i got a nice overpaint from a friend so i'll make some adjustments to the image and will include the changing of the rim-lights.
    i looked up the book on amazon germany – it's over 300 € at the moment... :/ i'll watch it – maybe i can buy it for a reasonable price one time...
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    made some changes lighting-wise

    i got a great overpaint from a friend - so i just had to make some changes...

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    cool concept, some lighting ideas.
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    thank you! your lighting idea looks cool, too!

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    I like the first image most.

    what is disturbing me is a symmetry

    http://gyazo.com/a67b929f67280a2d3375c483bdc4fa2c

    i tried to remove some elements to see what would happen

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    thank you so much for your time! you are totally right - the image is a little boring, because it's too balanced. i'll never do composition by chance again! but now i know what to look at during composing...

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    HI matey

    I just thought that I would chip in with the whole reference and inspiration thing and say check this out for ideas :-

    http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...d.php?t=201403

    he also has two books out that I would highly recommend that you get "structura" and "structura2" I have them both and feel totally jazzed after looking at them and cant wait to draw something again!

    good luck with the art and I hope you like Sparth's work as much as me.
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    hi,

    thank you for the recommendation – i'm also a big fan of sparth and own both of his books. i also like the guys from steambot studios and love their book exodessey! check it out – if you don't have yet...

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    ha ha ha I should have known you were a kindred spirit from the image

    I have a few more recommendations that you might like a look through for inspiration and ideas:

    http://www.chrisfossart.com/

    http://www.ralphmcquarrie.com/

    http://www.rodneymatthews.com/

    http://www.michaelwhelan.com - a bit more fantasy than sci fi but brilliant all the same

    http://www.rogerdean.com/

    http://www.alisoneldred.com/thumbsJo...ation-2-1.html

    http://www.melgrant.com/

    http://www.sci-fi-o-rama.com/2008/10...space-vikings/

    this last one is one of my favorites at has classic book covers from ages ago to the present day well worth a trawl through when you have the time.

    I think that should do you for a while and I wish you all the best with your work and look forward to seeing more in here.
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