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    Cow How she lookin'?

    Hey guys! I'm working on this image for the Illuxcon Scholarship. It's still pretty rough and I'm playing around with different edges, finishes and working with the lighting. I was wondering what I could do to improve this piece.

    Any little tidbits are more than appreciated, they're devoured.

    Thanks for looking!

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    If this is digital (looks like it), throw a layer on top of this and see if you can draw the outlines of her nude body, including interior shapes. That should help you firm up the drawing underneath. Probably because you've been working in silhouette, you've lost control of the underlying structure. (Examples: right breast larger than left, pelvis off center).

    After that, have a look at some drapery studies for getting that hem to flow right.

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    I like her subtle twisting pose. However, it looks like she's looking off into the distance at nothing. That is probly realistic, but as the viewer, it confuses me and loses my interest, because I don't know what she's looking at. I would much prefer to see her looking at the foreground figure. Maybe you could flip her horizontally and that would do the trick!

    She also looks to be maybe 5 heads tall. That may be ok for a short woman in reality, but it looks weird on paper. Try making her 6 heads tall and see if you like it. If you want to make her truly heroic looking, try 7 heads tall.

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    Smile Picture for scholarship, help would be most appreciated!

    This is for the illuxcon scholarship and any help would be greatly appreciated!

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    Please post it smaller.


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    From the looks of they are wearing a mask,which is attached to the neck?

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    And you already had a thread that you could have just updated: conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?t=245133

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    Good point, merged.
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    Considering that it's for Illuxcon, I would say you should focus on the narrative of the image and make sure that your message/concept is coming through. Right now I really have no idea what you're trying to say, but it looks like you're trying to say something. The arms could use more anatomical structure (right now they feel very round, like the limbs of a stuffed animal with no skeletal structure underneath), the hands are missing altogether, and her upper body is a bit large proportionally compared to her legs. The perspective of the ground plane and back leg is also a bit confusing. Get out a mirror or a camera and see if you can do this pose, sticking one leg behind you without bending it or the foot. It looks like her back heel is very slightly off the ground, but I don't think it's enough based on how far back in space it looks. For the ground plane, I think the problem is you laid this texture on top without taking into account how angled that plane is from our point of view. It looks okay on the wall plane directly facing us, but the planes of the doorway slanted away from us and the floor appear distorted because the texture on top is flat.

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    Quote Originally Posted by dierat View Post
    Considering that it's for Illuxcon, I would say you should focus on the narrative of the image and make sure that your message/concept is coming through. Right now I really have no idea what you're trying to say, but it looks like you're trying to say something. The arms could use more anatomical structure (right now they feel very round, like the limbs of a stuffed animal with no skeletal structure underneath), the hands are missing altogether, and her upper body is a bit large proportionally compared to her legs. The perspective of the ground plane and back leg is also a bit confusing. Get out a mirror or a camera and see if you can do this pose, sticking one leg behind you without bending it or the foot. It looks like her back heel is very slightly off the ground, but I don't think it's enough based on how far back in space it looks. For the ground plane, I think the problem is you laid this texture on top without taking into account how angled that plane is from our point of view. It looks okay on the wall plane directly facing us, but the planes of the doorway slanted away from us and the floor appear distorted because the texture on top is flat.
    Wow! Awesome critique! Thank you so much for the feedback. I'll work on understanding the perspective, I was worried about the texture looking too flat. I'll work on the proportions too. I did paint the hands but added the glowy orbs to show her magic. I wanted to convey the idea that someone "summoned" her and that was a mistake. Maybe I could show her holding a skull or something, or one of the monsters from her hair about to leap and bite the foreground person.

    Again, thank you so much!

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    Looking a little closer at it, I can see the upper hand a little, but it's pretty hard to see. I would pull back on the glow on both of them, especially the lower one because right now it kind of looks like you're trying to cover them up. And btw that upper hand is looking a bit small; the general rule is that your hand should almost be as long as your face (from chin to hairline). I thought you might be going for a summoning scene, but tbh it took me a while to notice the book in the lower figure's hands; it's quite small and tucked away in the corner. I didn't get that the main figure was evil or dangerous perhaps because she's glowing white and yellow which felt holy to me. I get what you were going for now with the figure ominously shadowed filling the doorway, but I think you need to push the evil/threatening aspect; the face might be a good place to start. She has kind of a blank, peaceful look going on, maybe narrow the eyes and dip the eyebrows. Angling the face down towards the seated figure might also make her feel more threatening. Just my 2 cents ofc

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