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    Probe

    Did this relatively quickly trying to get cleaner lines than usual and not getting too bogged down in detail. Comments gratefully received as always :o)

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    I think it looks pretty good.

    I think the composition is a little stronger on that left side though. It may have been the intent. I am not to sure. But i noticed my eye would linger above the turrets in the distance trying to make sense of what they are for and doing.

    Overall though I like the simplicity of the work and the colour choice is very good IMO.

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    Looks very nice so far.

    The one thing that really stand out is that blue light. I really think you should have some blue in an additional place in your composition. That blue is so isolated it doesn't feel like it belongs. Maybe you could put some blue light in the machinery in the left side, or perhaps some blue in the sky?

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    I think your overall composition needs a fair bit of work. Think about the lines your shapes are making and how that leads the eye around the image. Right now for me I can't stop staring at the cliff face in the centre of the image

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    Hmm I like zeph's points. I'm not sure if I understand him about the cliffs stopping the eye. That's what they're supposed to do, and I think it works.

    The comp would be stronger without the probe. There is a clear focal point of high contrast with framing cliffs to block the eye. With the probe, there are two distinct focal points which is bad. Is it a little boring? Yeah, but some shots for films are a little boring because its just setting the scene.

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    Thank you. You've all made very good points. Especially Zeph with the paintover! Its really useful to see a composition broken down in this way. I know I still have a lot to learn about composing pictures which is, of course, why I post here :o)

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