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Thread: SteamPunk City
July 14th, 2012 #1
Just want some critiques on composition before I keep rollin with this one!
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Hey. Its really hard to tell where this image is going to end up because its so loose at the moment. I would try and define my values a little more. and work on the figure in the foreground.. if that is a figure. Make sure you have a strong idea where the light source is coming from. In my opinion its always better to over do the light and dark in the beginning in a thumbnail so it will read with a little more punch.
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I would make sure you have your horizon line settled. Its really too rough to see if hte buildings are correct but the river looks a bit incorrect. I feel like maybe it isn't flat enough. Its a great start though. The "steps" on the right side of the picture frame look too big. Wooden slats are usually placed in the ground to make makeshift steps, but if that is a person in the foreground, that would make those wooden slats as big as redwood trees. The distance between the figure and the city looks to be a mile or two.
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July 17th, 2012 #5
I second the horizon line suggeston. I think you should be concentrating on perspective with this because I'm not sure where your horizon line is and without that, nothing will read properly. Figure that out, your vanishing points, and where the light is coming from, and then you can start worrying about things like fog or fancy details on the structures.
Cool idea though. Good luck with it.
July 20th, 2012 #6
So i consider this piece done, however, do you guys have any other critiques or anything? Always trying to learn from my work
July 20th, 2012 #7
I think I would say pause this for a second or two and ask yourself what says steampunk about this image, The visual story is vital to an image like this and so far all we can see is well a bit vague and undefined and to me personally says apocalyptic wasteland rather than steampunk scene.
How many thumbnails did you do for this to get the composition right, I am wondering as the guy outside the city in the distance kind of scene is one that comes up quite often and it would be nice to play with it a little to get something that really leaps at you and has the steampunk genre written all over it.
I am just trying to help you get something more from this than its giving us at the minute something that is bold and exciting that tells the story.
all the best with it whatever you decide and feel free to tell be to bog off if you like it as it is i won't be offended in the least.
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