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    House in a forest (lost in process)

    Hi!

    I'm really strugling with this painting and thought maybe some critique would help me do a bit of breakthrough.

    This is suppoused to be a house in the forest by a shallow river full of stones and rocks. The house meant to be roughly built out of wood and quite old.

    Please let me know what could be fixed!
    Thanks in advance!

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    More variety in the wood siding and roof of the house; old houses are weathered and have more hue variation because of it in the wood. Better sense of lighting in the forest and water. Maybe even spotlight some areas you want to increase as a center of interest.

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    More depth!!! =D Hope this gives you a rough idea of what I mean. The colors and levels could use a bit of fun.



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    Thanks a lot dpaint. I tried to follow your advice.
    Here's my improved illustration. What else could I try and fix?

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    Here is a paint over to show you how I would approach it. I opened it up and gave it more depth in the background plane. Added sky holes and varied the tree values and made some lighter the farther away they are. More variation in hue in colors. Changed the color of the rocks out of water so they aren't the same as the rocks under the water.

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    Wow! Thank you so much for this! It looks sooo much better now. It is going to be very difficult to resist the temptation of copying your overpaint on my orignal file. But I will try to interpret it, rather than copy somehow.

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    Here's another attempt to improve this painting. I tried not too completely copy dpaint's overpaint but still kept on glancing at it from time to time so in the end it looks similar to dpaint's work, just worse
    Will try and do some more work on it later.
    Please let me know what you think!

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    wow dpaint your plein air painting experience really shines in that op!

    dicharge not saying you should copy dpaints op exactly, but i think there are some points you missed.
    the shadow cast by the house is not readable in yours because of this rock/stairs formation.
    the area of the deer is much more peaceful in dpaints op, due to less strokes with softer edges, and at an much easier angle. yours read quite agressive compared.
    and the soft edges/lower contrast of the wood in the background.

    looks good though keep going.

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