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A random illustration of an alien going way too fast on his new space ship.
The bent speed lines don't produce as much of the "speed" effect as they could, and the "snow" on top of them does not help either. They look more like cirrus clouds. Very straight lines with a variation of thickness and blur to suggest depth would have been better. Likewise, there could be more indication of velocity in the foreground: a few stray speed lines. Even the spaceship angle and the slope of its greebles could be made shallower to improve the feeling of speed.
The pose and expression of the alien are too relaxed. Its maw is open but its eyes are too tiny and empty to convey terror. And it sits too straight, even bends forward a little, and its arms look relaxed and in control. I'd expect the head thrown back, terror in the eyes, uncontrolled tension in the muscles, the whole figure jammed into the seat.
You haven't thought the anatomy of the alien out - you're ad libbing everywhere and producing inconsistent form. Tighten the form, it will help you with lighting and expression.
And you could think the color diffusion too. The spaceship is a very bright red, why doesn't any of that red reflect on the alien and diffuse onto its shirt? Stop compartmentalizing the color and think how nearby objects interact via reflected light.
I could go on, probably, but that should be enough for one round of changes.
Last edited by arenhaus; May 9th, 2012 at 08:38 AM.
Thanks man, those are some good notes. I'll see what I can come up with to make it better.