Thanks for the great feedback Kiera. I quickly applied it to the painting, and it looks massively better now (at least anatomically). There's probably a lot left to clean up that I'll try and come back to, but I needed to get started on a second character since I'm doing two on two different color palettes for my color theory class.
Besides color theory I'm also taking life drawing this quarter, so I probably jumped the gun deciding to do character designs as a project before getting far enough into life drawing to do them well... but it's all a learning experience I guess. Started the second character with an anatomical sketch so hopefully it looks better (ignore those terrible looking feet).
The main thing that bugs me is the lack of color. She looks pasty and it seems like you only used two hues for her entire body. This doesn't look natural because in real life our skin is made up of several pigments, colors, shades. By using several colors ranging from red to peach to brown to orange, etc, and by implementing more detail and stronger contrast, your painting will look more like a painting and less like an half-hearted chalk drawing. (no offense).
There's not much I have to say on your drawings that wouldn't be a repeat of previous comments, but I must ask; Why are you doing all these tribal designs with white girls?
I suppose it just strikes me as odd.
I personally think you might be hindering yourself by not having a good look at relevent cultures. Especially since all three of these designs follow a similar trend of "skimpy top, skimpy skirt" which isn't bad in itself, but reminds me a little too much of what I'd see out at a club. In the isle of man. Which is as far from any tribal culture as you could possibly be.
That's what tends to happen when we don't do our research, you see. We draw what is familiar to us, then add what we /think/ is relevent to a type. In this case it'd be "Tribal means feathers and skulls, right?"
Just compare these pictures with your current designs. I tried to look around for a diverse enough range, but they still don't bear much resemblence to any of these. Perhaps you wish for there to be a bit of a 'modern american/english' flair to the designs, but I just don't see enough 'tribal' influence, personally, to really think this is a tribal girl without being told that.
What I'm saying is, do your self a favour and look around at other cultures, take down notes too.
What is their fabric made of? What silhuette does it produce? /Why do they wear it?/ and what do "I" Want from /my/ tribal designs?
Research is key to anything you're not familiar with, even things you think are! Especially when you want to come up with interesting and appealing ideas.
Ah, well. You can still do your study gathering, you know. Just because you're into your drawings doesn't mean you can't stop and re-asses what you have. I've quite litterally saved you some trouble and chucked you some refferences already as a starting point and you've not yet finished your pictures, right?
So you can still look at the clothes you've designed, against these ones and think how you can improve your own designs.
Ah, but I don't want to push. Atleast you've changed the second girl's bear hat to something that matches her outfit. I was going to comment on that before.
If these aren't really tribal girls, what are they then? They both have skulls and tatoos, small weapons and traveling gear *by the first girl, atleast* are they part of a group of girls who rob others? Part of a small cult?
I think it's good to tell us what /your/ aims are, so that feedback can be more tailored to your project.
That's it, really. Good luck, mate. Edit: Oh, christ. I'm a shit reader, they're part of an animal summoning culture. Ah right. That why they have the skulls? As a direct way to communicate with whatever animal?
Last edited by Naidy; April 11th, 2012 at 09:43 AM.
You may want to fix the anatomy before going too far into coloring. Here are the proportion issues I see:
Waist is too long
Arms are too short. They also look a bit skinny to me
Hands need to be bigger
You still have these issues in your first drawing.