I've been dead for a while work hard in the studio. So here's my new job.
Hope you like it, and constructive criticism are very very welcome!
Great concept, i like it a lot!
However there are some issue. You subject is in foreground, this makes your eyes going all over the image looking for a middleground because you have a background. Our brain tend to consider foreground as peripheral vision so makes you search for a middleground to focus. I think you just need to rearrange the composition, putting the figure a little back and setting up your background to let us look your subject.