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    Updated April 6: Beetle rider.

    I'm a long time lurker, but this is my first real post here. I figure I want to improve and so..time to get critique from the community.
    These are just pencils, so fairly easy to fix. Figured I'd get some feedback before I move on to inks and colours.

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    use more references. a rainbow scarab with its large frontal horn would make better design sense than just making up a bug head. also the scarab should be larger. use more references an make studies (observations that you can retain and apply later) out of them.

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    Do more thumbnails. Is really a boring, straight from the front image with no interesting perspective/angle (and this front angle does make it bit harder to get the form and shape of the bug too) with a static and fairly symmetric pose (no twist in her body, legs mirrored etc, bug's legs symmetric and so on, but with the added problem that the inconsistencies on the sides are extra visible) really what you need to show what you want? What is the mood supposed to be? Is she supposed to be on a nice leisure ride or is she supposed to be on a patrol, looking for enemies? Where is this happening? The background looks extremely generic-cartoon like you've never really looked a real tree and its foliage and the background looks more like a park, which again brings confusion what is happening, since the girl looks more like some sort of post-apocalyptic guerrilla fighter, but she's riding her giant beetle in a clean and nice park?

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    Blank: I had considered the scarab you mentioned and went with a different one. I see your point so I'll probably switch back. I had used reference bit I guess I failed if it doesn't show through my work. I don't mean to sound as if I'm complaining but I don't understand why the scarab should be larger? Is there a design purpose or is it a personal preference? I'm worried the girl would get lost with a larger scarab but am willing to reconsider that.

    Tiny, thank you. Your advice is bang-on. I hadn't put enough thought into the image before starting it and that's probably why I'm struggling so much: a lack of direction. I'm going to go back to te beginning with this one

    Man, I've been out of the critique circle too long. My ego took a hit there. Thank you both for your replies.

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    Hey I did a couple of quick thumbs to help you better visualize what Tiny and I mentioned. The size of the bug is a personal preference but it generally makes more sense as well.

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    Ok folks,
    It's taken some time, but I've reworked this piece taking advice from here and from other sources. I'm back at the "catch me before it gets too permanent" stage. I've changed the beetle to an atlas beetle, so I guess it may not be a scarab anymore?

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    now draw the screne very roughly from several different angles, ie move the camera around until you find the best one.

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