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    the crowd

    My interest here is more the crowd, so I want to see if I can have something simple in the back ...this is a very instinctive painting which means there is not a lot of planning and also ideas changes on a frequent basis.

    The first floor of the building in the middle could be a butchery where an employee roasts some chicken outside spreading its smell all over the street

    Done for portfolio, no rule , no ideas limitation, so any critics are welcome ...

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    Right now, a lot of the faces are pretty undefined, while some of them, namely the man/monster in the foreground is sharply rendered. You might want to continue rendering the faces so it's even.

    Where did it ever say that Humpty Dumpty was an egg?
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    i think the straight line of the building is to straight.XD add somethink like a label or a glowing area from the sky.

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    The two things that pop out to me are the character in the lower right with the teeth and the window in the middle. I personally would like to see a little bit of the cityscape in the background through the whiteness. It doesn't have to be much, but I think a little bit back there could really add a finished feeling to the picture.

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    It is pretty tight though. Well done.

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    Quote Originally Posted by LoopyWillow View Post
    Right now, a lot of the faces are pretty undefined, while some of them, namely the man/monster in the foreground is sharply rendered. You might want to continue rendering the faces so it's even.
    That is actually what I like about this piece- my attention is drawn to the laughing creature immediately.

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    Yeah, this makes me smile!
    I like the concept. That bluish light in the back is really nice.
    Cheers!

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    I love it. I'd like to see the faces more finished, but I like polish, so maybe it's just me.

    I was once on the receiving end of a critique so savagely nasty, I marched straight out of class to the office and changed my major (sketchbook).
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    My only recommendation is to tighten up the sky a bit and call it done. Great work!

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    For me, it is all about intent. If your intention was to draw our eyes to the happy chap... well done. If not....

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    In addition to all the valuable critics, I want to share these final selection with you to see if it is worth to incorporate few things from old versions into the one currently selected, also to know if I took a right decision by picking "A".

    I first liked "D"because of its warmness , but later I realized I better discard it . I realize I should avoid having warm color for all buildings otherwise the contrast between warn and cool color would be poor(and the crowd wouldn't be spotlighted no more). Every time I started adding something special on the background the crowd was no more the subject .

    I feel "A" has more balanced composition, divided in 3 blocks, 1/ the warm colored crowd, 2/ the blue sky ,3/the dark buildings.
    Ok, I shared all I had in mind regarding the overall composition and my choice. What do you think about my choice?

    Until then, I'll go through the previous critics and stick to A...thanks.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Stoat View Post
    I love it. I'd like to see the faces more finished, but I like polish, so maybe it's just me.
    glad it is almost done for some people, but a little clean up of the foreground won't hurt , Thanks!

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    Quote Originally Posted by LoopyWillow View Post
    Right now, a lot of the faces are pretty undefined, while some of them, namely the man/monster in the foreground is sharply rendered. You might want to continue rendering the faces so it's even.
    When I am more sure about the overall composition , I will definitely clean all faces of the closest row

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    Quote Originally Posted by Abductee View Post
    i think the straight line of the building is to straight.XD add somethink like a label or a glowing area from the sky.
    I was a bit thinking about that myself... a light glow or some sky reflection just to break the white vertical lines...yes thanks

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    Quote Originally Posted by Bai Fan View Post
    The two things that pop out to me are the character in the lower right with the teeth and the window in the middle. I personally would like to see a little bit of the cityscape in the background through the whiteness. It doesn't have to be much, but I think a little bit back there could really add a finished feeling to the picture.
    Because I am not a composition expert , I was really worried about this white shape (as you can see on my multiple version panel just uploaded)... I agree it doesn't feel too natural here but I though that would make the composition stronger. So I guess the rule is something like "have strong shape as far as it look natural"..

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    Quote Originally Posted by LordLouis View Post
    That is actually what I like about this piece- my attention is drawn to the laughing creature immediately.
    I will try to have the attention on the whole first raw ... but among the first row people I may push him a bit more, I will see, Thanks

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    Quote Originally Posted by Greenhouse View Post
    Yeah, this makes me smile!
    I like the concept. That bluish light in the back is really nice.
    Cheers!
    yep like him you can be a monster and still feel good about it ... just kidding

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    Quote Originally Posted by Greenhouse View Post
    Yeah, this makes me smile!
    I like the concept. That bluish light in the back is really nice.
    Cheers!
    thanks!

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    trying to save some post...
    Stoat :
    I am planning on cleaning up way more, but until know I had to much doubt about a bunch of things(see mutli-version board)

    ZombieMariachis :
    Thanks but I am use to push the clean further..

    Bai Fan : agreed, it is all about intent. So the answer is no, I would like to draw the eye to all character of the first row, which means they would all be as sharp as the laughing monster ... but maybe at the end one character from the first row will stand out a bit ..in a subtle way..

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    i love D and E. when you combine them and add more glowing lapels. i think you have a dark undercity atmosphere. and the face in the front is not so unexpected and you dont need to edit them so hard.

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    Quote Originally Posted by DENDROTTO View Post
    i love D and E. when you combine them and add more glowing lapels. i think you have a dark undercity atmosphere. and the face in the front is not so unexpected and you dont need to edit them so hard.
    I forgot that old sketch.. but yes there is some cool stuff in D and E.. D for the colors, E for the fact that there is no sky and we only see the buildings... when ever I get back to it I will certainly pic these..

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    C or E with a little of the blue lights you have in D :p

    Very nice painting by the way !

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