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    Workin' Hard

    Hey so, I'm working on a new project for class this wednesday and I was wondering if you guys would give me some helpful critiques about my comps! These are not finished pieces, just pencil lines with quick photoshop colors. The final would be ink/watercolor on board. What are your thoughts? Also, it's a vignette format. that's the only requirement.

    On the first image I plan to change the hair to make it less Dragonball z-ish -.- more fluid, spread out. (it bugs me sooo much now that I made that connection! LOL!)

    On the second i also got the suggestion of making the hair a bit more fluid, more gaps, which I thought was a good thing to do.

    Anything else?
    Simple vignettes really. Position changes, anything to make it better. More interesting.

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    Oh right, and when I fix the first one the crown will be better. So, don't go too hard on that. ^.^

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    For one thing you haven't said much about the project. Taken on their own this feels melodramatic and cliche, but hey, it's possible that you have been assigned some sort of legendary monster that cries blood and you're working with it. If you haven't, you might want to reconsider this. The blood makes it feel like something a teenager does when they're trying to be "edgy".

    Anyway, the composition in the first one seems odd since the sides are so crowded and there's so much space on the top and bottom. The second works out much better. The anatomy is questionable in both pictures. In the second one it looks like her head is nearly as wide as her shoulders and that ain't right.

    I like what you're doing with the hair and the flower but you need to get some reference for the bodies. In the first pic the problem with the hair isn't so much that it's blocky and stylized, it's that it's heading out of the picture and taking the viewer's eye with it. Find a way to bring it back in, don't just spread it out without purpose.

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    Ouch, edgy teenager, blood will most likely be removed after that one!

    Made anatomy adjustments, will add a faint decaying//veiny sense around the area the body is touching the water to add a bit more story. (There are lines there but I'm not sure how noticeable from my jpeg size).

    Petals in the water will also still be there

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    anatomy correction inc.

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    Took away the tears, fixed the shoulder/breast size//locations.
    Added some vein type features on her body around the water.
    The petals will still be in the water as well

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