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Hello CA I am a senior animator at The Art Instituted of Botson. Here is the current state of my final film as an animatic. I need as many crits, notes and comments as i can get. soon i will be moving into animation and i want the story to be as solid as possible. Enjoy!
Last edited by Yoshic; February 14th, 2012 at 03:33 PM.
Storyboarding can be pretty tough and it's not my forte. I think you got most of the story telling elements nailed pretty well though.
I think your sound effects could be better. I know it's not the final product, but the first half of the storyboards had me thinking this was some sort of couch potato/lovecraft story until I realized the hushed cheering was hushed cheering and not the whispers of an old god. I thought that was amusing honestly, but it's something to consider.
A couple things you might look to change, would be when the TV is delivered. Instead of him stretching and then walking over, I think the anticipation for lifting it would be improved if he walked over, maybe pondered the weight and then stretched while standing right next to it. That will help establish how heavy this thing is. Then while he attempts to move it the first time he shockingly realizes that it's either a lot heavier than he imagined, or he's really out of shape.
Something like that.