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    WIP, looking for some feedback?

    Okay, let's try this again. It said that the thread posted, but apparently it got lost in the interwebs because I can't find it anywhere. I had this on my sketchbook, but decided I didn't want it there until it was finished.
    This is a little digital WIP that's sort of imitating those emo, really over-edited black and white photos where you can only see the hair and the eyes and/or mouth. I hope you know what I'm talking about, as I'm having trouble finding examples (don't know what to search for). I haven't gotten to blending the shades together properly, but I want to make sure the features are still recognizable and anatomically correct before continuing. Any advice is welcome, and thank you in advance for any comments.
    PS I don't think it's important, but I have absolutely no idea what category to put the picture in. Sorry if it's wrong.

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    Your piece is so abstract that it borders on non-representational. My brain tells me I'm looking at a face. The mouth has some unsettling things going on. The hint of nostril looks pretty high compared to what I perceive to be the bottom of the nose. What I perceive to be the left edge of the neck doesn't line up correctly with what I perceive to be the edge of the chin as it approaches a hidden ear. Now that I look at it some more I feel like I'm seeing too much cheek, like the visible part of the face is too wide.

    Are you tracing off of a photo? Something is confounding the impression of an accurate face...strange anatomy, incorrect cast shadows...something.

    I hope that helps.

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    Thank you very much for your feedback! And no, I'm not tracing off a photo, haha.
    Yeah, this is kind of what I was worried about. I have trouble with abstract pieces, so I've been trying to improve upon them. At first I liked the picture, but the more I looked at it it just looked... wrong. Couldn't figure out what it was, though. I'll definitely try to work on the things you mentioned.

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    Can't say that I get the "emo" vibe from this. You should really try to find a photo to work off of because at this point I really can't tell what I'm looking at either..

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    @rex-craft7 Thanks for your feedback! It's not really that I'm trying to get an emo pose or whatever, it's just that it's often an effect used by "emo" kids and I didn't really know how to explain it otherwise. I will make sure to take your comment into consideration when editing the picture, though.

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    "CUTOUT" Filter in Photoshop? Just curious, because it looks an awful lot like it...

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    I'm not sure... Maybe, but I used to do these kinds of pictures all the time a few years back and I got the same effect in Picnik before, although I have no clue how.

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    Patrick Nagel......
    look at his work if you are not familiar with it already

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    @williams73 No, I hadn't heard of him before. Your suggestion was really helpful with a more effective way of representing the mouth and nose, thank you!
    I tried to make the changes you guys suggested, and a few more in places that I found looked weird to me. I've been playing around with the chin, but I think the lips are too high up now. What do you think, does it look any better now or am I flying off in the wrong direction? Haha.
    Edit: Man, the second I posted that one I stopped liking it. Is the one below any better?

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    If you're going for a stark graphic style where the forms, while flat, are stil described by the interaction of light and shadow, you're still running into problems. The mouth is looking a lot better, but we're still not seeing what would happen with those forms under harsh lighting and dark shadows. The nose is off and it is REALLY distracting. The under-the-chin shadow doesn't read as accurate at all. The face is still reading as very wide. I'd suggest looking at yourself in the mirror in a dark room with a flashlight shining down. Another approach would be to bring photos into Photoshop and really crank the values in either 'levels' or 'brightness/contrast' to see what you get.

    I'm off the forums for the next few weeks...good luck with your piece!

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    Thank you very much, DPFX. Of course, everything you've said seems correct! Working on it right now! Sorry for my inexperience with digital art.
    Best wishes for your weeks away from the keyboard.

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