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December 14th, 2011 #1
A more narrative oil piece. Crits welcome!
This is my latest painting called "New Home Old Home". Oil on canvas. Conceptually, it's exploring the ironic way people admire nature while striving to control it. I'm trying to communicate this through a more narrative vibe. I developed the painting using a grisaille technique, but some of the value contrast got washed out as the colors were glazed on. I'm not sure whether I managed to fix that or not. Excuses aside, please let me know what yall think!
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Nice concept...I think to pull this off and help your message hit home you need to do one of two things: nail this as far as technique and drawing go, or go the other way and twist it a bit further toward surrealism. Seems caught between right now if you know what I mean? The character, bunnies, mower right now just aren't developed well enough for it to feel like much more than a painted cartoon. Either way I think it is important that your paint handling technique fits the subject or statement a litle closer. Just my initial reaction, two cents.
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December 15th, 2011 #3
December 15th, 2011 #4
Yeah, the landscape looks nice but the guy and the bunnies are kinda creepy in comparison. He doesn't look like he's really looking at the rabbits. And I find that the way most people cartoonify rabbits to be pretty unappealing -- like teddy bears with long ears.
Anyway, the overall effect is like Wallace and Grommit stuck into a post-impressionist painting and I'm not sure that's quite working for you.
I really like that landscape though.
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I think the figure's expression is vague as well. I am not really clear as to whether he is an amazement, angry at the sky or yodeling. I really like the narrative you are trying to express and once the aesthetic is nailed down, it will be a lot easier for a viewer to take your message from the painting.
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December 15th, 2011 #6
December 15th, 2011 #7
I think it could benefit from some colour variety. Right now it looks like everything is within the yellow bit of the colour wheel, with yellow-greens and oranges. Everything seems to either be a yellow, a green-yellow or a red-yellow or brown.
Placing some colour from the opposite side of the colour wheel might help to freshen up the piece and pull focus to key areas.
Sydney artist Luke Marcatili
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December 15th, 2011 #8
Giving it the 'squint' test, the viewer focus is drawn to the two dark trees against the light sky. If it were me I'd really tweak the values to draw us towards the figure (seems like the highlights on his face should maybe be lighter than the highlights on the rubber tires, for instance.) You even have him in a white shirt...seems like a good chance for some light.
The piece does have a dreamy, unreal quality which I like. I don't even mind that he's not looking at the bunny while he's waving to it...that kind of touch appeals to my unsettled mind if its intentional.
Also, that 'main' bunny's shadow is too long.
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December 18th, 2011 #9
Marcatili: Thanks for the comment! I was intending to focus on that green/red pop between the lawnmower and the surroundings. You're totally right though, it could definitely benefit from a bit of color variety. Thanks.
DPFX: Thanks for checking it out! I'm glad you picked up on that ironic bewilderment and general confusion in the figure's gaze! I think you're right, the values could use a bit of tweaking. I was focusing on color as the primary director in this one.