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    Graphic novel WIP

    I'm working on a graphic novel which I'm going to release for free as a PDF. At the moment I'm submitting a page every 1 or 2 weeks on my blog. I've been getting feedback from friends and a couple of people on the internet, but I thought I could probably get a lot more help from here

    Here is page 1:



    I've done 6 pages so far. Sometimes I go back and makes changes to pages already posted, I'll be doing that as I go along.

    Here's page 2, which links to the next so you can click through the pages:

    http://danielkeating.blogspot.com/20...og-page-2.html

    Should I just post everything I've done so far in this thread?

    Thanks, looking forward to feedback and criticism.

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    This is looking really nice

    One thing that did jump out of me - the picture of the guy paying and petrol pump looks less finished than the other pictures. It's like you stopped working on it sooner and it jars a bit. That may just be me seeing that though, I don't know if others will notice it.

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    Couple things:

    Try using larger brushes, the guy looks pretty uhhh..."patchy?"
    It looks like he only has two joints in his index finger, counting the knuckle joint.

    Also on page six, I can't figure out what's going on with the diagonal arm through the center of the page, it's pretty jarring.

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    thanks guys.

    i've been moving on to the next page before really polishing off pages. i may come back later and fix things, or i may not. there are many more pages to do. the style i've chosen to use requires a lot more work before it looks "finished", which i guess is why most graphic novels and comics use their particular methods.

    the hand coming across the page has been pointed out as jarring by a few people now, i think the evidence is mounting up. the hand is actually knocking on the front door of the house.

    oh, and pointing out the missing joint makes sense. i put in wrinkle lines for one joint but not the other which doesn't make sense.

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