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    Need critque on this please

    so ive been working on this one for a while, i would have liked to get some input while working on it but i don't have internet at home. This is to be used as a ref for a oil painting. looking for opinions on whether stuff looks right and is readable, on the composition and colors.

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    This looks like it'll be sic! This sideways composition gives me a Normal Rockwellish feeling, I love it! I would desaturate the V's in the back a little more but that's just personal opinion. I think it would also be sick if you brought the camera angle even lower to give it a more menacing feeling, but that's just again my likes. Nice!!
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    I like this.

    Calculate the light from the torches with more precision, though. Make them all consistent with each other.

    Maybe try making the floor darker, and play with the contrast.
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    Looks good. You put in some serious time with the design and it shows.

    I think the main problem here is the way the thing reads. There are basically six very bright spots, a row of heads, and everything else is extremely dark. My eye goes straight to the torches, and then looks at the strong line of Guy Fawkeses, and then, as an afterthought, notices there's a girl, a pig and a headless cop. I sort of doubt that's what you intended.

    If it were me, I'd push the entire background more to the midrange and really kick up the edge lights on the foreground figures. Paintover below.

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    Good stuff.
    Only thing I have to add aside from the other comments is that I get a strong (and distracting) sense of the cop's head/face feeling cut and pasted on. Maybe that goes along with the theme here or not?
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    I love it. The one thing that jars is the single mask that is obscured by one of the torches - just above the bowl. Makes me want to look round the flame.
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    Wow! Really cool image. I'd think about filling out the background with more figures and varying the saturation amongst them. You may also want to consider whether you really need the band of empty space along the bottom of the canvas. Cropping this out may give you a more theatrical panoramic feeling and focus the image on the gaze between the two main characters.
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    tandy1000: thanks, i was considering a lower angle but i didnt have the space to stand back with the camera in my apartment when taking the photos.

    arenhaus: yeah the torches aret totally consistant yet because ive not changed them much from the refs.... i will get on it. i have darkened the floor you'll see when i post an update.

    giacomo: wow thanks that really helps, guess i couldnt see it looking at the image so much. first thing i'll do is bring the crowd up to a mid tone in value.

    wooblood: it is pasted on lol, not ment to look that way ill get on it thanks

    black spot: that is rather distracting, ill try moving it.

    rseward: thanks, yes i hope to add more people to the crowd and have more perspective . also i think youre right taking some of the ground away is an improvement.

    thanks again to all who commented, ill get on the ccorrections and post an update at some stage tomorow.
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    i would suggest making it darker and pushing everything back...

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    Ok this is really a nice composition, and it doesn't need a long explanation of what the story is about which is really nice to see. And it is weird, which is of course delightful. The think I like in Sone_one's overpaint (although a tad dark for my taste) is that you can really see the rhythm of the heads. In your original the up and down flow is interrupted by the flame glow so it's one flat line of reds. I also like that in his the fog effect around their heads is behind them, not in front - gives a feeling of atmospheric depth.

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    Sone_one: great thanks for the PO, i really liked the mood in it, definitely what i was looking for. though i thought the crowd was too dark, they are an important narrative in the piece.

    justa: i lessened the glow and desaturated the crowd, do you think it reads better now?

    anyone think i should go even darker?
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    It's reading much better now.

    I'm bothered by the position of the seated figure. His foot and knee are behind the cauldron, but his right arm is stirring it. I would think that would mean that arm would have to cross his chest much more sharply and the torso twist at the waist (and it would be an awkward sort of pose).
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    stoat: thanks. yeah there is a slight overlap, i will move the pot to the left a bit to correct this.
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