I am looking for some feedback on a logo I am working on for my website. I had a class critique at my university but I didn't get much besides silence.
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It's interesting, but what is your goal with the logo? Are you going for a mechanical look or perhaps a dark gritty look? What's the goal with the logo. What I mean is that if you are trying to use this in a website design, consider where it's going to be placed upon the main page. For this logo, the only use I could see for it would be on a banner on the web. I don't know how this would work on a business card. Show us some examples of the ideas you have of it. Perhaps a temporary business card layout or stationary, let's see more.
As you use square brackets, it would be a good idea to make side elements fit to this hard, geometrical style. Currently it seems to be a little bit random. Also, experiment with the balance of a space around the typography to create a focal point at your name.
But what's most important, run through the basic questions posed by Mat. Plus think what do you want to communicate to your audience with your design.
Unify or synthesize everything into a single idea. Right now you've got nothing because nothing relates to anything else except in the most superficial way.
What is your concept? What are you trying to get across symbolically? Right now I'm getting your name is the neck within Cruella DeVille's portrait collar.
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It looks like 2 different ideas that don't mesh together. I suggests 1 or 2 things.
1. Figure out which on the 2 (the wings? or the bracket )ideas you want to go with and make the whole thing conducive to that.
a.) If its the wings, try loosening up the brackets or better yet lose it all together and find a type that goes with it, something like a hand drawn script font.
b.) If you go with the bracket, then tighten up the edges of wings, something maybe along the lines of being blade like. Or loose the wings all together and focus more on type setting.
c.) You could try to hand draw the whole logo and transfer it to a vector (Just to make it more manageable). I think that could fit well with your illustration style.
2. Scrap it and start over by really thinking about what it is you truly want to convey through your logo.
Hope this helps.
Thanks for the feedback.
What is the logo for?
What does it stand for, is it a personal logo, who are you, what do you represent, what do you want to tell people with it?
Wings tend to represent freedom and "fastness", Bat wings represent a look and a form of life, no offence but those wings are a little like a young bird's that can't fly cause the feathers are deformed and the shape is much irregular...
theres to much going on in your logo, look at other succesful logos (e.g. mercedes, apple, nike)
Your logo is nice but what do you want it to represent? When I look at the logo I always expect some connection between the graphical identity and the business/blog/person that it stands for. According to the logo, I'd say it is a symbol of a birds/dragons fan page. Try something smaller and simpler.
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Anyway, I personally like the idea of blending both geometry with looser shapes, but the wings/claws/whatever they are are overpowering the rest of it. That's just how I see it, anyway.
The name should be the focal point, certainly. But I think the wings could stay if they carried less weight: maybe make them half as wide and a barely perceptible grey?
You have to modify a lot that logo to be a good one...
Too much wings, not big enough text, not unique. No offense to your name but Hilary looks like it is spelled wrong.
Your logo needs to represent you as the designer to your future clients. Right now, all I'm getting is that it's looking kinda goth with dark wings and your name but not much else. I can't really read you, persay. If anything, make the decorative elements smaller and better woven into your overall design and make your name stand out. Play with the typeface a bit with the kerning or make one capital bigger and try nesting your last name into it. Are you trying to come across as bold, edgy, cutting-edge, rebel, or hip?
Logos are the first in line for communication for many companies and for you. Sell us yourself in one statement. Think really hard about why certain elements are there.
I can think of two things off the bat on how you can improve the design,
1. One thing why not integrate the wings into the main logo so that you can do away with the log altogether and create breathing room around the logo.
2. Also Black as a colour is too strong, even for me, loosen the tone where possible or try different colours that will best suite the tone you wish to sell.
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Liked your portfolio,thanks so much for sharing it.
Really enjoyed the scarlet letter atmosphere, and the hostess packaging the most. But I like hostess so Im biased LOL-
The general consensus would be to answer some basic questions for us, so you aren't getting personal taste critiques, but rather how well your design is achieving its stated goal. With the assumption that this is an attempt to develop a logo that helps to identify you as an artist, we need a better understanding of what that is....
1.How would you describe you self as an artist? Edgy, whimsical, dark, romantic(good versus evil sense, not smoochy)
2.What are your aspirations? Could this turn into a multifaceted business for you? Just an avenue for self expression?
Any logos that you like or feel drawn to...any you despise?
Id love to see some ideation work from you on your design, see what your thinking etc!!
It might sound super nitpicky, but have you considered adjusting the kerning just a touch? The brackets give it a rigid, symmetrical feel - however, 'hilary' doesn't seem centered compared to 'steinberg'
'Y' is such a pesky letter...