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    Hey guys, it's been a long time since I've posted anything in the CC forum! I feel like all my work is seriously lacking...something, although I'm not sure what. Probably I just need to keep on working on the basics like I have been, but I thought I'd go ahead and submit my latest piece here for crits to give me a push. This was done for the Illustration of the Week challenge.

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    im loving your style and pictures!

    one thing i think your pictures would benefit from, is having a stronger/more distinct/planned value pattern. i recommend getting your hands on arthur wesley dows Composition: Understanding Line, Notan and Color. im not through it yet, but so far i like it a lot.

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    I agree your piece looks really strong right now- not a whole lot that I would do to change it. I think your focal point could use more contrast though, which I'm assuming is the girl on the horse, like making her coat a little darker. I think she would stand out more and be more obvious as the center of attention for the piece.

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    I think this style depends so much on the drawing that you really need to nail that. You're getting better and you'd have had my vote if it was CHOW-style voting but I think you kinda fell down on the guy's hands and face.

    I also think you chose an awkward composition in that all the important elements are massed together. The silhouette would be just a blob, you wouldn't be able to tell what was going on. You should have pulled the individual components out a bit more. The poses are on the static side and the guy's stick is awkwardly placed, so in line with his leg.

    Still, it's pretty good though. A few more of these and you'll have that nice watercolour look down.

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    I really like the style! The lines and colors look really nice. I think the composition would have been stronger if the focal point wasn't so dead center. Also the dude's right arm feels kind of awkwardly angled because its hard to tell if his body is in front or behind the head of the horse. Beautiful rendering, I look forward to seeing more!

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    Hey guys, thanks so much for the crits! sone_one, I went out and got that book- it looks like a great resource- I don't have any books on composition yet and it looks like that's a big thing I need to be working on!!

    I made some changes to hopefully improve the image a little, although I see my real problem is that I just didn't do enough planning in the beginning (in a hurry to make that challenge deadline, although that's no excuse lol).

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    The changes look good! Also this is a really good website for composition as well: http://www.wetcanvas.com/Articles2/135/120/

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