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    Another critique

    Since i'm receiving realy great critiques on my work, i decide to post this one, that my friends love and I made this one some months ago.. Is another piece of fanart, Piper from Storm Hawks and i wasnt trying to realism.

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    You could easily re-read all your previous critiques because they still apply.
    Quote Originally Posted by Naidy View Post
    Well, little miss. With all due respect I think it'd be best for you if you took some time to look at the critiques, do some studies and see if you can revisit the works you've already posted.

    Otherwise, you're not really learning anything.
    So, how about doing some anatomy studies of the shoulder/torso area, posting them here, then trying to fix the top picture for a start. That way you can move forward.
    Especially this
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    you need to learn anatomy


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    Quote Originally Posted by TinyBird View Post
    You could easily re-read all your previous critiques because they still apply.


    Especially this

    oh i actualy didnt saw that one, must be a recent one.

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    Or if you don't want bother trying to correct these, you might just as well start a Sketchbook thread, instead of spamming the WIP section.

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    or at least... update some thread with fixed work....

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    Quote Originally Posted by TinyBird View Post
    Or if you don't want bother trying to correct these, you might just as well start a Sketchbook thread, instead of spamming the WIP section.
    I'm not trying to 'spam' the section. Because i'm starting to began to learn anatomy (already have a few books to read) i just rly want a critique on this one because my friends say 'is my best' and i enjoy drawing on this style, and want some serious opinion on this particular piece. Believe me this is the last thread i make on this section before i do some serious study.

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    Quote Originally Posted by pauloricardo View Post
    or at least... update some thread with fixed work....
    Pode parecer snob mx eu ñ corrigo os meus trablhos antigos. Para servirem d exemplo do que estou a fazer mal

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    It has nothing to do with snobbishness, it is just that you need to stop thinking about "fixing whats wrong" but realize the meaning and complexity of the term "study anatomy". Reading a book, I am afraid, doesn't even cover one percent of it.

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    Quote Originally Posted by DaniSantos View Post
    i just rly want a critique on this one because my friends say 'is my best' and i enjoy drawing on this style, and want some serious opinion on this particular piece.
    Okay, well then.
    Nezumi's comment about you drawing with shapes instead of volumes is in effect in this one too.
    Her neck is way too front (probably caused by you copying the crappy style of Storm Hawks without understanding enough of human anatomy to avoid the mistakes despite changing the style) and seems to be sticking in uncomfortable angle, especially because the gem is supposed to be in the middle of her collar making the neck look more twisted than you meant.
    Her nose seems to be misaligned with her mouth and her eyes seem to be looking at nothingness, past the viewer.

    Her hair fringe is close creating a tangent with her neck and the same fringe of hair doesn't seem to be connected naturally and looks more like it's growing out of the other piece of hair. Considering her front hair, the back of her hair might've benefited if it was kept closer to the original stylized shape since the front hair have kept the original stylized look. Also none of the back hair seem to conform to the perspective/view the rest of her head is in, making the hair look like it's growing vaguely sideways.

    The shading in the neck is sloppy, doesn't work to make the neck look three-dimensional, and looks out of place as the whole face is missing same shading.

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    Her eyes are crooked; glaringly so. The one on the far side of her face is tucked against the side of her nose and the closer one has almost an eye width of space between it and the side of her nose.
    Add learning perspective to learning anatomy.

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    Thank you. That what i want to read ^-^

    ok i'm off to my studies now. Thankx everyone, i learned more here than on 4 years on DA.

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    Quote Originally Posted by DaniSantos View Post
    Pode parecer snob mx eu ñ corrigo os meus trablhos antigos. Para servirem d exemplo do que estou a fazer mal
    então... uma vez que tenhas um que fizeste mal, ao refazê-lo, terá a oportunidade de corrigir o que fizestes de errado, e assim, ter uma noção do que evoluístes...

    quando eu disse corrigir os trabalhos antigos, quiz dizer para refazeres os trabalhos, atentando aos erros...

    tive muita dificuldade em fazer isso, e sei que é bem difícil, pois me desanima redesenhar o que eu já fiz, mas fazendo isso, eu evolui mais rápido

    se precisares de ajuda am algo mais específico, pode me enviar mensagem

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