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    I've gone a bit blind from looking at it too long. Red lines, anyone?
    I'm mostly worried with the hand and its proportion in relation to the figure.

    I used this as reference for the hand: http://thumbs.dreamstime.com/thumbla...62081b1Aa3.jpg
    And this for the pose: http://eu.123rf.com/400wm/400/400/do...background.jpg

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    The only thing that sticks out to me is the angle of the hand in relation to the book (or vice versa). I'm no physics major, but I'm pretty sure gravity would take hold and the book in it's current position, would fall from his hand. Note in the real life picture, the book is more horizontally angled, and the finger tips are pressing against the right side to keep the book upright and open. That's from the pressure of the book laying flat and being pulled down by gravity / weight. In your drawing, it seems to me that the book would slip from his hand without something supporting it from below.

    To correct this, I would suggest either changing the book to lay more flat, or move the pinky and ring fingers down to support the bottom edge of the book.

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    Yep - seems a bit largantic (that's right, new word, right there). But nice job - everything is well drawn other than that proportion issue.

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    I resketched the book and the hand. Now it looks too small to me? Or maybe it's just I was used to the largantic.

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    The book does look a little too small, but you could just say it's a small book. I wouldn't say the hand's noticeably off.

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    The problem with the hand is that when you hold a book like that, the hand folds slightly to cup the book, while we see it in your drawing as being flatly open. We shouldn't see the pinky finger's knuckle as much.

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    I resketched the book and the hand. Now it looks too small to me? Or maybe it's just I was used to the largantic.
    I have an issue with the hard line from the ears to the chin and also the bottom of the nose

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    Proportional rule of thumb for hands: the length of the hand, from the tip of middle finger to the base of the palm, is roughly equal to the height of the face from hairline to chin. In this case, you're going to want to make it slightly larger than that to account for perspective.


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    Thanks, everyone. Here's the latest correction.

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    get a book and pose in front of a mirror. observe what your hand in specific and your posture in general is doing. thats imo the easiest solution.

    what i noticed trying this is, that the knuckle of my thumb is basically in the middle between the wrist and where the fingers start. to me its those things you want to look for in reference (less about the particular curve of a certain fingernail, which is quite hard to avoid i admit, yet neccessary imo). or the gesture of your hand holding the book, paying closest attention to its energy-statement (if thats making any sense).... no matter how well you render certain details... if you miss the gesture, its going to look bland.

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    Both references have a hand steadying the book. Also look out making the pages too thick that it won't shut like it is at the moment.


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