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    Speed painting critique wanted.

    May I ask for some assistance? I did a speed painting today and I wanted to ask for some feedback, as I'm trying to push myself further.

    Speed painting critique wanted.

    Any advise would be awesome, thank you! :-)

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    The cool guy with the cape would be cooler if he stood strait. Lookes like he's falling to the left.

    Also the yellow/orange sky.. I dont know.. You should look for reference for those clouds.

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    I'd personally like to see the floating island separated from the planet a bit more, at least enough to show the point at the bottom in silhouette. Something giving a bit of proportion would be nice too, I have no idea how big/far away these objects are.

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    I agree with all the above crits.
    The guy from the right has a very boring gesture and a disconnected lower arm, seemingly.

    Think about the composition more, try out your ideas using thumbnails. We have a crowded planet/island thing here, the guys there, some high contrast but not so exciting mountain stuff there at the bottom and empty space in the middle. I don't know about others but when I look at a picture, I usually see the path/pattern my eyes take and if they find a nice route... and here they don't.

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    Thanks guys. I'll get to work and post updates when I have them (not tonight though, too tired :-P)

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    This isn't the way to move forward. Don't try to fix this piece...you're better off just doing more work than fixing something. You have to study and learn about composition, value, color, etc. before tackling something like this! Just have to...don't know any other way to say it. "Speed painting" is only going to work when you know what you're doing with all the fundamentals. Focus on simple studies for now, composition and value. Move forward when you get a handle on those things...not before.

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    Quote Originally Posted by JeffX99 View Post
    This isn't the way to move forward. Don't try to fix this piece...you're better off just doing more work than fixing something. You have to study and learn about composition, value, color, etc. before tackling something like this! Just have to...don't know any other way to say it. "Speed painting" is only going to work when you know what you're doing with all the fundamentals. Focus on simple studies for now, composition and value. Move forward when you get a handle on those things...not before.
    I understand what you're saying. Perhaps "speed painting" wasn't the best term to use. More like it's fast for me personally, because I never churn out anything near that quality in such a short span normally. I'd like to take the time to make sure better though, thus asking for thoughts. ^^

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    Sure, just thought I'd share mine on the best method for learning about what goes into making a scene like this. Once you understand the fundamentals art is no longer a big mystery or struggle...that is why it is important to have them down solid.

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    Hi there matey

    You have gotten some pretty solid advice from the others so I will stay away from all that and say fade the planet back a little to give some depth and get some whispy cloud accross it to push it back a bit further. a bit like the ones on this book cover.....

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    Another thought I had was to make the floating mountain a little more irregular like the floating mountains of Pandora from "Avatar" and as mentioned before move it away from the planet but also add some smaller bits its not a natural feature so give it a ripped out of the ground feel with some smaller chunks and bits.

    Just my thoughts, I hope they help and all the best with the image

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    Updated the piece based on some of the critiques I've received. New critiques and thoughts would be appreciated. ^_^

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    Hi matey

    Its improved, much improved but I feel the planet still needs less detail and moving back a little more, it also needs a gradient type fade, like the ones I supplied, its a distant thing and needs pushing all the way back.

    The other thing is like shiNIN said we have a lot of dead space in the middle, so how about going a few shades darker than the yellow background and hint at distant mountains or a forrest or something.

    Just some thought, I hope this helps

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