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    Holding a star wip

    Any advice or comments would be appreciated. Although not really the face- I haven't quite gotten there yet (I'm planning on just having her looking down at her hands)
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    She's reminiscent of the Corpse Bride to me, which is a good thing because I think she's beautiful. I honestly don't see anything wrong with it but I like how it's coming along, keep doing well!
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    There's an odd conflict with this, the face is sunken and thin, the waist is thin to corset levels, the neck has tendons visible but the legs, arms and breasts are full. Are you trying to go for a thin-looking style? If yes, you should push it harder.
    Also here's a ref for the female torso: http://www.superstock.com/stock-phot...ges/1804R-2823

    Also the hands look very tiny and child-like, the knees seem to "meld" together (if she's putting the right side leg forwards, it doesn't show in the crotch area) and there's this irritating un-symmetry going on. It's like the pose it trying to be symmetric, and it would look good symmetric, but little things like hand placement and hip ..."knobs" (I guess those are trying to be hip bones?) are off. Actually the whole figure is leaning, but I don't know if this is just a photo issue.
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    You can't look at the object held in your hands like this without bowing your head.
    And the mentioned anatomy issues everywhere... Breasts of a front view figure aren't circles with the nipple in the middle...
    Get some reference. It's not hard to do in front of the mirror either.
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    Well here was my original reference http://www.istockphoto.com/stock-pho...php?st=19c8a99
    I should look at more just for the general anatomy problems
    I wasn't really going to leave her chest like that either, I was just sketching out where to place it but I guess it wouldn't hurt to go ahead and fix them now.
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    Working on making her thinner and changing the position of her head so she's looking down more
    I feel like the placement of her hips is very strange now, and I need to work on getting her face more symmetrical

    sorry for this low quality picture, my camera isn't working so I used my phone
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    You seem to be guessing a lot. Don't do that; you won't learn anything new from what's already in your head.

    Get a good reference for hips. Hips aren't perfectly curved like that, especially not on a very skinny girl. Her arms connect in an extremely strange way and they're shapeless. You need to look up pictures for the shape of the collar bones and neck. Look up charts on leg musculature and/or look up pictures of really thin legs.

    The concept, although slightly overdone, is nice, but it will need a lot of work yet to be good.
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    (concentrate on the actual woman)
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    Thanks, I'll look for some more references
    I was looking at this girl's hips/legs http://fashionlawyerblog.com/wp-cont...inny_model.jpg
    and this girl's collar bones/neck http://www.istockphoto.com/file_thum...oking-down.jpg
    I guess I need to look for pictures where I can see the bone structure more clearly
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    You don't follow your reference picture, for example, the roundness of the arms are visible even behing the clothes there and you drew them very square.
    Under the elbow level the hip already starts to widen, you put the waist too low, the torso seems to be a bit too long.

    The head, my favourite human part (breasts are the second so I'm pretty sensitive when I see them messed up)... is far from being realistic. Oversized eyes, extremely pointy chin and so on... You should use a reference for that as well. I imagine you plan to do it but I couldn't say nothing about that part.

    Your drawing definitely improved but it's still a long way to go. But your attitude is promising, you listen to us and put effort into making a better version. Keep up with it

    Hm, I like your refs... You still didn't follow them well enough but you need practice to draw what you see.
    The collar bone has a nice curvy shape, maybe looking at other refs will help to see it. Look at the hip more carefully as well.
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    I think I've fixed her collar bone now.
    Still working on getting the hips right.
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    Holy cow, what is going on with that lady's mons veneris? Anete, the lady in the photo. Either she has a thin pubic mohawk or labia like the jaws of life.

    Sorry, sorry. Kids these days, shaving their parts and putting things on their stuff.
    I was once on the receiving end of a critique so savagely nasty, I marched straight out of class to the office and changed my major (sketchbook).
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    Quote Originally Posted by Stoat View Post
    Sorry, sorry. Kids these days, shaving their parts and putting things on their stuff.
    I'm personally more disturbed by the fact that people voluntarily get themselves a French manicure. Ungodly.
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